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i liked a few moments when a slave encounters another, but then the story did not seem top grip me, is it that i found the slave master and other slaves, metaphorically speaking, a bit getting on the nerves may be some more clarity is needed on the plot did i miss some thing basic\ \ i am sorry i could not really fully appreciate your talents, but you have them

nice poem calling for heaven to open under a perfect cloudless sky. nice lines but then falling sun depressed a bit because of the way you end may be that is what you intended may be you are sad today holding on to each other’s heart until Forever claimed my promise of you.

juST superb i enjoyed the whole spirit, after a long time, a refreshing beautiful poem

i think you aRE best when you describe filial itiomacy, dialogue with mother, friend, stranger but the plot does not get thicker as one moves along, you seem to leave loose ends untied but then story is moving in terms of shades of human nature and dialogue that you display pl keep it up improve the plot