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AGE: 39
LOC: Pasadena, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: March 07

I’m an artist utilizing language. I seek answers in the footsteps of the ancestors of civilization, yet I know not the question. Sometimes I’m a Philosophy student, but generally find Philosophy lacking creativity. Sometimes I’m a Literature student, but generally find Literature not quite philosophical enough. Professionally, I was the Gothic Lifestyle and Music editor for Universal Studios’ Horroronline, wrote press releases for camera and lighting companies, did reviews for Sci-Fi Universe, and am an active member of the Horror Writer’s Association.

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I view myself as dust And fall away. Like a reflection of glass This spirit of indecision Conjures itself within me. I am like a serpent of temptation Simply waiting for a victim. Where do you linger now? In dream, my angel? Where does your desire take you? Far from me, and close? Even as my eyes hold you Do you ever slip away. The construct of my mind Penetrated by expectancy Dispels each sense in turn. Illumination waits with blinking eyes I am cut in two Becoming a twin of myself. All of t...

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Your sweat was an elixir And I was alive Under your body Alive Under your hands Fingers on my flesh And your flesh was my bread And we swam And we swam Through the flood You wear me warm wear me Thin wear me wicked wear Me out and I hold you within But your eyes are my gemstones Touched the back of your head And pulled you into my smile I shine I shine Shine in your hands Shine Like that fire on your chest Burn and shine As you create me Create me In the image in my head Phenomenize me as new...

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Aethier set off for the Great Castle alone and on foot. Having spent the last few days alone, she considered her upcoming meeting with Lord Curtea with equal amounts of anticipation and dread. Mordel had not returned, and she wondered where he had been finding his shelter. It wasn't unusual for him to stay away from their castle overnight, but his absence had been long this time. Somehow, Aethier knew he wasn't coming back soon. She wondered if she would ever see him again. Although her jour...

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Aethier remained in the Lord's Castle. The last thing she wanted was to be alone, and as an orphan and outcast among her people, she had no other friends or family. She grew accustomed to her new surroundings, and Mordel’s absence, with an ease that surprised her. It was as though her mate was simply out. She had been, after all, quite used to his absences. They were in the large music room of the Lord's Castle and Aethier was working on the composition she had been writing the day Mordel se...

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Through frost-covered windows, they peered directly into the fading sun, drawing the curtains around their faces as if the action would hide them from Julia's view. She could sense them, of course, and they had to know it. Still, they persisted in their feeble attempt to hide themselves. Julia’s dress gave her station away: she was a Mistress of the Lord’s Castle. And that she was a Mistress meant that she was Mara. These people were food to her, and so they locked theirs doors and prayed, ev...

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by Pogopaws

Wow, this is a great prelude. You've obviously put a lot of thought into the creation of your world. Unlike a lot of "otherworldly" pieces, nothing here seems contrived. Everything is just unique enough to communicate the mystery, but not so exotic as to be corny. The writing style is excellent, and you divulge just enough to get the reader interested in the coming chapters. I really have nothing negative to say about this - am really looking forward to reading the rest of it.

by Mdhuilin

The story is well-written and the characters compelling, but it's hard to tell where it's going. You mentioned that might be the case, and that it is necessary to read further to really understand, but the problem is there isn't anything that grabs the reader and compels him to go the next step. If you're going to hide the gemstone deep in the story, I think you need to provide more hint of it early on. The following sentence is awkward: "Everyone who’s afraid of dying have nothing to worry a...

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