azrael's profile
AGE:
21
LOC: San Diego, CA
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: April 21
LOC: San Diego, CA
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: April 21
Heylo. I’ll probably be using this urbis account mostly for my lyrics.
And with any luck, I’ll improve our writing.
I might post short stories here, as well, you never know.
I listen to music, alot of music…Mostly rock, a lot of classic rock, punk rock, progressive rock, and the like. To name a few artists:
Jimi Hendrix
Gatsbys American Dream
Say Anything
AC/DC
Queen
Motion City Soundtrack
Pearl Jam
Maylene & the Sons of Disaster
Boys Night Out
Cartel
Fall Out Boy
Thrice
Thursday
Northstar
Coheed & Cambria
Brand New
Anyway, a little about me…
I play guitar in my band, Copilot.
I also enjoy drawing. One of my favorite hobbies, other than guitar.
I read comic books. Alot. And I would probably out-nerd y…
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The cityscape obscures the skies as street lights burn brightly And the stars turn cold as we forget What’s past the city lights Caught up in our selfish needs And troubled by our pointless fights It’s no wonder we can’t see the stars Blinded by the city lights Starless skies (Starless eyes) Our forgotten dreams (Tearing at the seams) It’s a wonder we’re still alive We need to open our eyes We need to live our lives We can’t hear the stars' whispered cry Over the roar of the cars and concrete...
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here we are, living in sin embracing what we're told what we're given it's the same old story same old game you're just a face in the crowd a face with no name but don't you want something more a crown of glory, your name up in lights don't you want something to live for now we find ourselves surrounded by unfriendly faces we're on the clock, on a no-name basis don't you want something more to be remembered, to one day fly don't you want something to live for can you look back and be satisfie...
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here we are, living in sin embracing what we're told what we're given it's the same old story same old game you're just a face in the crowd a face with no name but don't you want something more a crown of glory, your name up in lights don't you want something to live for now we find ourselves surrounded by unfriendly faces we're on the clock, on a no-name basis don't you want something more to be remembered, to one day fly don't you want something to live for can you look back and be satisfie...
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The sea and sky go on for miles - an endless scarlet symphony, like brush strokes on the heavens Yeah, this is the only place Where we can paint the town red this sunset is ours alone, i swear but my only claim to the skies lies in The red horizon dancing in your eyes And to think I’d forgotten There were sights like these watch the waves crash down reaching for a chance to walk upon the sand the sun sinks slowly into the sea in its wake, cascading shades of red leaving its mark in my mind, n...
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here we are, living in sin embracing what we've been told what we've been given it's the same old story the same old game you're just a face in the crowd a face with no name but don't you want something more a crown of glory, your name in lights don't you want something to live for and now we find ourselves surrounded by unfriendly faces we're on the clock, on a no-name basis but don't you want something more a crown of glory, your name in lights don't you want something to live for can you l...
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Hahaha. Light hearted and amusing. Not really what I normally think of when I think of the blues, but it's a fun song nonetheless. It follows the lyrical form of the blues, and that's good enough for me. You took a funny theme, and gave us all some recognizable pop culture images to help us see your point. Kudos, it was well executed. What key would you write it in? I hope you won't mind if I take this at sing it at a campfire or two, haha.
Suitable lyrics for a hard rock song, or for punk, I guess. Nothing novel, as misery is an oft-visited topic - but could make for a good fast paced song. My advice would be to remember that everyone writes about being miserable. Or in love. Or about the excesses of society. Aim to make your writings different somehow. How? Not sure, that's up to you. Once you figure that out, you'll stand above the crowd.
Not bad, but a little unclear, in regards to what you're trying to express here. Are you disgusted by his choice? Are you asking him to change his mind? Are you warning him of the perils of love? Are you expressing your hate? The lyrics kind of go around the place, so it's a little hard to tell where you're going with it. I personally think it's always a good idea to focus on one piece of imagery, to better paint a picture, and the "door" idea you visited a few times in the song was a good id...
It depends on what you mean as mental health issues. There are cases that are strictly genetic, caused by imbalances in hormones, or even by injuries to a person's brain. There are cases where head trauma resulted in a person taking on a radically different personality, one with inhibition, or wise decision making. Others lose short term memory capabilities, or forget how to perform very elementary tasks. However, a declining level of morality and education in societies can indeed cause menta...
I don't really like that there are so many little images in here. For example, play the clown? It really doesn't fit in at all with the atmosphere I see some of the song constructing. But I suppose that's just a stylistic thing. I prefer to take one theme or image, and paint a picture of words around. Perhaps your theme should revolve around the sun and flowers, and the fragrance of life. It would certainly be more memorable to the reader/listener. Good luck!
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