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AGE: 17
LOC: Fort Myers, FL
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: March 31

i love poetry and would like to improve on it all criticism is appreciated thank you.

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Poetry / his storm
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i hear the storm, as he thrust inside me, the thunder breaks, the sky opens up his sweet like rain glistening off my body. deeper... the temperature rising, i can hardly breath my fears are subsiding. deeper .... he's touching me, I'm loosing control my mind is racing, my heart is pacing. deeper... deeper... i can feel him, inside me, touching my soul our bodies move as one as we ride the waves of ecstasy i never want to fall..... but... the storm has stopped. silence... shh.... shh... can yo...
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Poetry / farah
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Fog ...escaping the depths of the earth, Arriving ....leisurely giving, Rise to birth. Animosity... diminishes like.. the sunset across the horizon, Heaven.... opens up, and gives light to the new season.
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Poetry / talk to me
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Heart talk to me I will listen, Even though You've blinded me before I will listen, tell me Will you let him in or, should I close the door in his face, Should I make him wait Or, open up to his warm embrace. Heart talk to me I will listen Tell me, what do you feel for him? Do you beat faster every time he's near, On the other hand, do you beat the same and just wish he'd disappear? If you won't talk to me Just please answer me this Do you love him…. Mind reason with me, I will listen, Don't...
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Poetry / if i could
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As our bodies entwine In a lavishing pool of lust, The world seem to Diminish, As images of you And me, Cascade, The intensity grows Releasing an inner bliss, That replenishes our mind Body and soul. that's when I know, If I could I would Lay right here forever In your arms, If i could I would Protect you from those, Who wish cause you harm. If I could I would Make love to you till The break of dawn, If I could I would love you forever till the, Pain is gone.
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Poetry / no more
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no more lies no more pain, no more heartaches lets stop the rain. lets go back in time to how we use to be, lets make peace with each other hand in hand just you and me. no more fights no more tears, no more dwelling on wasted years. can we start over fall in love again, go back to the days when you were my lover and my best friend. we've been through worst before and i know we'll get over this to, i don't want to lose what we have baby boy, I'm still in love with you.
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Wow that poem had such superb imagery very nice job I really liked the first line. Your poetry is sophisticated sex which is very nice we can picture it in the beautiful way it should be viewed but its not at all pornographic great job
wow so beautiful like a little piece of ecstasy for my soul. as i read it it drew my mind to think about my beloved and it expressed exactly how i feel for him. i feel alot of people can relate to this poem especially those who are in love. i enjoyed how you space it out creating a poetic flow and a picture in my mind
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Poetry / American Idol
well i loved your use of word play on a topic wich most of us understand at somepoint i didnt completly get the illusion but i re read it and i understood where you were coming from and i fairly enjoyed it
Poetry / The One To Blame
your poem speak so much truth. people are always blaming one another for there misfortune but they never think that maybe it was there own fault they ended up that way great work
well at first reading i did not quite understand but i read it again and i saw the picture your words were painting and thats amazing your poem creates great imegry
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