bamabelle1981's profile

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AGE: 27
LOC: Foley, AL
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: April 26

I’m in my mid-20’s. A mother, a wife, a friend. I love writing & painting when I am inspired. Many of my writings may not make since to anyone other than me, but they are what I am feeling at the exact moment the pen hits the paper. Several I wrote while in  middle/high school . I know they need some work I just haven’t gotten around to them yet.

After I got married I stopped writing, drawing, and painting for 4 years due to poor health. For some reason I just can’t write when I am depressed or am going through a “rough patch” in my life. I guess this makes me the odd ball. Now I am trying to get back into it and learn from others reviews how to “really” write.

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Limericks / Suicide Jane
Version 1
55 Reviews   1 Comment
Suicide Jane sat alone in the rain Debating how to end her pain. Lightning came from the sky And hit Jane in the eye. Now Jane will no longer wane.
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Poetry / My Scars
Version 1
0 Reviews   0 Comments
My loneliness A fear of involvement Due to others bitter rage Sense of security A moment of tenderness Is what I crave My madness Has overwhelmed me Having to explain My darkened past And what I am left with Oh why couldn’t I be left the same My anger About my body I am ashamed so I hide You will never know me Because of what I am On the outside.
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Poetry / Logan's Lullaby
Version 1
1 Review   0 Comments
Oh, sweet baby Don’t you cry Lay down your head And close your eyes The day is done All work is through Daddy and I We both love you So dream sweet dreams Til tomorrow morn I’ll wake you when The new day’s born
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Quotes / Woman
Version 1
4 Reviews   2 Comments
I am woman, hear me bitch!
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Version 1
5 Reviews   0 Comments
Why can’t humans show emotion the way that monkeys do? When monkeys get ticked off they just sling some poo.
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Quotes / The Unknown
I love this, but I think it blongs in the poetry catagory.
Limericks / Review
A little odd, but isn't everything to at least one person. I like it, morbid as it may be. Keep it up!
Criticism / Unnerving
I love it! It is exactly what the 'sigh' is. The only part I am unsure about is the last paragraph, third sentenence. I don't think 'sorries' is a word. Personally I would drop that word and just leave it as 'The worries still....' It is thought provoking, and I give you a uge kudos.
Short Story / Why didn't you come?
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Haiku/Senryu / Your Grain
Interesting, never thoughtof it that way before. Kudos to you for finding a different way to put it. bamabekke1981