Very interesting. I liked it. I'm a little disappointed that it cut off where it did, but if definitely left me in suspense for more. There were a few small things here and there grammatically that needed cleaning up. When you said "Already entrapped by her spell, Paradise was..." there was some subject agreement issues. It sounds like Paradise was entrapped by 'her' spell. Also, I believe you used 'know' in place of 'now' once or twice. Otherwise, I liked it. The characters seemed authentic,...

A few grammatical things aside, it was quite a spectacle. It was very good. I'm not entirely sure if it was great, but it was pretty darn close. I liked the interconnectedness of the characters, it fell together very nicely. I wasn't entirely sure about the end, I thought there would be some minor redemption in store for the unnamed criminal character along with the realization of David, but the story elements were intense and absolutely enthralling. Thank you for this piece, I look forward t...

Interesting piece. I was a little put in the first half, it just seemed too jumpy, and hard to follow. It went from bird imagery to a drunken night between pals to confessions of love and relationships and finally hit the main point. I also wasn't so sure about the tense, it kept switching from past to present and back, though I must say, the transition was a lot smoother than in other pieces I've read with the same problem. Overall, I liked the story. It's an interesting premise, but it need...

I liked it for the most part. Small personal opinion: The pink taxi cab, pink heels line? Reverse the two, pink taxi cabs sound rarer. But that's just me. To the main review: I didn't read the preceding chapters, so I may be in the dark about what's going on here, but as a stand-alone it seemed to work pretty well. Very dramatic, very believable. I didn't know exactly what to make of Dominga as a character, she seemed a little unreal, but I'm assuming that ties into part of the mystery, as he...

I realize the genre is flash fiction, but the whole thing still felt awfully choppy to me. I got enough from the introductory sentences to piece together what you meant, but it still felt like some sort of broken-up excuse to use big words. While things start to come into focus a little more towards the end, you still don't end up getting enough of anything to make sense of the situation, or get a running start at a plot. On the bright side, I'll admit, I liked the dialog. I think given a lon...

Well, poetry is definitely one of the harder genres to tackle, and I'm glad you took a swing. I saw some sort of weirdly synced rhyme scheme going on in the first stanza, and though it was a little awkward, I was digging it. I also felt like there was some non-descript religious meaning? I could be way off base, but if that IS the case, I congratulate you. People who find inspiration in their beliefs often do great things. I'm sorry to say, however, this particular piece just wasn't doing it ...

This tripe was absolutely delightful. Absurb and darkly humorous, I couldn't help but laugh. This belongs in the American Sub-treasury of Humor, as it reminds me of a great many tales in there by famous humorists. I have to ask where you came up with the idea for this, as it is ingenious. I especially enjoyed the bit about things he would let people get away with. Your main character gave of an aura much Inspector Clouseau. Thank you so much for this piece.

It's difficult to find substance in so few words, but I believe you have found it. It succinctly addresses the goal of all, really, all artists: to be appreciated. If your longer works are this neat and articulate, I intend to keep reading.

I like this. I have already reviewed some 6 words memoirs, but it still amazes me how much depth can be invested in such a tight word constraint. This statement, to me, summarizes the purpose of writing. There's always hope that you will create something beautiful, something that trumps all previous endeavors. I hope you keep writing, thank you.

I have to start with the obvious. The convention errors were bothersome, although some were so glaring that it makes me question whether it was done on purpose to achieve a desired effect (I DO realize the title of the piece included the phrase "No Periods," but it was missing other things too). If this is the case, the effect was lost on me. The disconnected-ness of the piece reminded me - vaguely - of Finnegan's Wake. Bear in mind that book didn't make much sense to me, so again I think per...