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AGE: 17
LOC: La Grange, TX
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 14

Im pretty sure I have OCD, but I am a good person. I love my family, my friends are the best, and school is easy. Life is deffinately good on my end of the spectrum…sometimes…talk to me…I’ll talk back…way more than you would wish…lol…but I must admit my friends do say that I can be mean and catty sometimes….lol…I think they are nuts…lol…jk…maybe <3

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Foul Midnight! Breathe thee once and leave to thy misty recesses Upon thy hour one nomad walk’d, dazed Upon thy bosom one nomad moan’d, amazed Upon thy lips one nomad knock’d, crazed Oh, Foul Midnight! Thou bringst me mine lover, betrayed, and leavest me with nothing but a nomad for reckless annoyance
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Short Story / My Last Trip
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I did not mean to. I was at a party and I was out of control. I took a shot of whiskey, smoked a joint, snorted a line, and then I licked a liquid drop off a stamp. Then I flew! I was off the floor, out of the room, and near the heavens. It was wonderful! Then, I felt a tremor, small but there and as I started to hear purple and see my friends voice in front of me the tremor grew and grew until my whole body flopped around. My friend Jenny started to scream and suddenly I was out. Black, I sa...
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Short Story / This boy...
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There is this thing about Keith that drives me wild. He is the first person in a while that I could just look at and know how he feels. Oh! How deceptive this feeling is. This feeling cannot quite be described, it is not lust (there is no primal need for him) but it also is not love (there is no deep feeling that is generally associated with 'the one'). It is almost a natural feeling. Organic. Original. Beautifully Unrefined. Like Cookies and Milk we float thorough the hallways of long forgot...
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Short Story / Deception
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Deception Sarah Beth was my best friend in Kindergarten. A best friend I thought I would never be able to part with. Unfortunately, sometimes your brain and your heart though. It was the summer of my 7th grade year and Sarah Beth and I were excited to finally be going into middle school. Sarah Beth was tall; she always was, even in elementary school. She had pretty blonde ringlets that cascaded down her back, and big blue eyes that, when you looked into them, it felt as if you could see her s...
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Short Story / You
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Sometimes I think I can hear you, walking through my house, as you did many years ago when we were smaller. The tinkle of your voice surrounds the air I breathe in. Your presence is stifling. I never could quite forget you; you never could quite forgive me. Even when we grew older, wiser, stronger, more mature, there was always that idea in the back of your mind. Deception; the kind that leaves an irreversible scar, the kind that stabs with every thought. The kind I inflicted on you so many y...
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Overall this was an outstanding read as a screenplay. I liked the reference to the perversions of the Catholic faith as well as the fact that her future changed with the choices she made. This had really good voice and I loved the flash backs and forwards and the correlations that were made between her mother and Evie. I hope you have great success with this as both a writer and getting it made into a movie. Good luck!!
Screenplay / Veil Over My Eyes
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Screenplay / Satan's Cheerleader
This, honestly, was not the best thing I have ever read in my life. The plot was very random and I am seriously wondering if you thought this through before writing it down. I was left disapointed and wanting from your writing.
Quotes / Knowing
How very true. Is this an original quote or just one you heard in passing? Good quote overall!
You have a couple errors...the noncapitalization of your I's, a couple of fragments, and some sentences that didn't have a clear sentence structure...but other than that I found your over all story captivating and though I am not sure about what happened to the other (girl I am presuming) it did hit quite close to home on a moment that has happened to me before. Overall, good job and I hope you continue writing pieces like this, a piece that bares the soul without being overbaring. I thank you.
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