Hi, Well... I get the fact that this is frustrated post-grad, but what is the purpose? You convey the life of a bummed out student concisely and the habitual boozing, night-time games, drugs etc. all ring true, but i was left wanting to know where "Tom" was actually going... If you post more, I would certainly read on and hopefully, will be enlightened to his career adventures.

Hi, Would make a nice little "Shooting Gallery" type short, no real point, but fun none the less. Maybe you could inject a few flash sequences that show what may have happened had he drank the coffee. Just a thought! Thanks

Hi, I have not read 1 - 5, so I have walked into world which is confusing for me. The actual construction is absolutely fine and read well... As I said, I need to read the 1st 5 parts and then maybe I will be enlightened. If I can find these I would gladly read on. Thanks!

Hi, Terminatorish springs to mind. I know you have posted this as a short story, but is there more, or is it just a quick glance at a smashed future for us all? Glady, I hope your world is very much in the distance! Just my thought, but you could pad this out further and explain a little more on how "we" arrived at this dire juncture. You mention Tyler, he wished to create a blank canvass with which to start again... What is your wish... Thanks

Hi, Well... If you are asking, "Can I construct a sentence?" the answer is completely... a yes! Do you draw the reader in? I would have to say, with the amount you have posted, I was not really bothered about the narrator and my "Juices" were not really stirred. I understand that this "person" was having some form of mid-life crisis and now required a reflection of a seemingly wasted existence and a carthartic moment was in the wings. I would certainly read more, if you were to post more. You...

Hi, As always, I end up being in the deep end and not knowing what the hell is going on!! My problem, not yours! I will find the other parts and hopefully fill in the gaps. With that said, I still managed (I Hope!) to kind of get the trend of the story... A medium or/and a serial killer.... Ironically, there was a Hitman who worked for the mob called Iceman, not a very nice man. Your character rambles were interesting enough for me to try and seek further into that world. See you and keep chi...

Hi, Well, I found part one, and I'm glad I did. Very happy to see it's not just me who finds the mind of a serial killer fascinating. I have studied many killers and the tabloidy books that are written in droves and most do not explore the inner turmoil, but concentrate on the gory details instead. Are this people really any different from us? What part allows them to speak of throwing away another being as if a empty crisp packet. I had only one problem with your narration, using such terms ...

Hi, It sure is a strange old world, and inspiration comes in many forms... You have posted very little, so it was difficult to really get involved with the characters and the dire news. I think if you have more, you should post. What were the complications and why all the secrecy of the baby. What is the lead up plot? I would certainly read more... So write on! Thanks

Hi, Kind of confused at the moment! (My fault not yours - Stumbled into chapter 5) It's difficult to get a real insight into the main character, once again, not your fault. I can get a sense of a reflective 'grumpy' person, but i will have to read more to get a clearer idea. Thanks Bickle

Hi, I got a bit confused whilst reading this, mainly because of the rambles. It was difficult to know where one sentence began and one finished. I never paused for breath! Is this finished or part of a bigger picture? If you go back over your work and insert correct grammer, it would easier to comprehend. Thanks for sharing. Bickle