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AGE: 22
LOC: Bloomington, IN
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: August 06

Hi, my name is Mohammed and I’m 21 years old. I like to write but i’m pretty much limited to poetry. I hope you guys like some of my writings. Enjoy!

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Poetry / Lost Memory
Version 3
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WANING MEMORY Although I can no longer see her, I’m sitting here, piercing into her delicate brown face counting the lines on her forehead. My method precise as I paint her forgotten memory Onto my mind's almost blank canvas Ready to be made up into a beautiful brown angel. I quickly strike the invisible brush on the canvas. Her sedated eyes sadly stare, Her skin smooth yet waxen with turned down lips That guards her smile like a hungry child. masterpiece done, I turn to go But her stare hold...
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Poetry / To Hesitate
Version 1
13 Reviews   4 Comments
What’s it like to hesitate till summers passed away? When maple leaves have vaporized and clovers burnt to hay. It’s like the dreams you dramatized but never got to play. It’s like the life you memorized but never got to say.
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Poetry / Lost Memory
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10 Reviews   3 Comments
WANING MEMORY Although I can no longer see her, I’m sitting here, Piercing into her delegate brown face Counting the lines on her forehead. My method precise as I paint her forgotten memory Onto my minds almost blank canvas Ready to be made up into a beautiful brown angel. I quickly strike the invisible brush on the canvas. Her sedated yet warm hazel nut eyes sadly stare, Her skin smooth waxen yet with turned down lips That guards her smile like a hungry child. masterpiece done, I turn to go ...
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Journal, Diary, & Blogging / ____________-
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Quotes / Under Belief
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Poetry / LITTLE LAMB
the reader feels the pain in this piece. you are able to take the reader to this dark world or tragic loss. very descriptive, well written & fluent. overall a good poem you use imagery is good. the only bad thing about the poem is that its very simple...
First of all the narration did this piece justice by keeping things simple and explaining (but not too much). i also like how u brought in opposition views and countered their arguments. just couple of things... "Media provides us with entertainment, shoves a beer label down our throats for a paycheck while the government stands by," government tried to ban alcohol back in the 1920's but it back fired on them... however the only thing that is wrong with your argument is most people who drink ...
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