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AGE: 54
LOC: Germany
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: May 14

just trippin’ along the milky way leaving a trail of stardust behind me.

i’ve been writing my thoughts since the age of holding pencils. i submit on this site because i like running down mainstreet in my underwear, some laugh while others cheer me on.

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Mother’s Wrath “Come my children, come and see all that I have created and give to you freely. But one small thing I ask; use these gifts I give, wisely.” Daily we gave thanks for the splendor at our feet took only what was needed for our families to eat. Took not a thing for granted the rising moon, nor setting sun season’s change we celebrated when the earth was young. Then, a growing arrogance when we no longer thought to pause and offer thanks for all that she had wrought. “Take heed, my ...
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Poetry / liar liar...
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liar liar... liar liar pants on fire caught you in the deed watched you chasin’ tail down on second street liar liar heart on fire i don’t even care just as soon forget about it as drop your ass right there liar liar soul on fire send you straight to hell bang... bang... bang... dead right where you fell. liar liar.
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Poetry / Mother's Wrath
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Mother’s Wrath Come my children, come and see all I have created and give to you freely. One small thing I ask, use these gifts I give; wisely. We thanked her daily for the splendor at our feet took only what was needed for our families to eat. We took not a thing for granted the rising moon, nor setting sun season’s change we celebrated when the earth was young. Then, with growing arrogance we no longer thought to pause and offer thanks for all that she had wrought. Take heed, my children, c...
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Poetry / The Muse
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8 Reviews   3 Comments
The muse sits quite patiently as I muddle thoughts confusedly she waits to inspirationally lend a thought intentionally bringing forth soliloquy that I perceived as clarity putting pen to paper hastily in a manner most surprisingly forging words most eloquently which must, consequentially have sprung, not assumedly, from divine spontaneity ever so brilliantly!
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Poetry / The Waltz
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The Waltz Shall we dance? Since you ask who leads whom in this waltz is uncertain May I lead? If you please with each beat of my heart keeping rhythm We can sway to the sound tender words from our lips reassuring We shall sail in the wind on the sea of our dreams love unfurling We’ll take wing in the air leave the ground far behind our undoing Let us glide past the moon shining bright way on high so alluring Then we’ll fly past the stars make a wish keep his light ever burning. Shall we dance...
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incredibly touching. the pain of distance between you is palpable. "i'll like you for always. i'll love you forever..." beautiful lines straight from the heart. this leaves nothing to misunderstand. from one mom to another, thank you.
Query Letter / Jewel Angels Query Letter
this would certainly get my attention. nice "teaser" into a another world. only one suggestion: ..."who seek to take over the Universal Realms, a name for all the worlds as a whole."--- "...to take over all the worlds known as the Universal Realm."
well done. you've shown the result of the "indifference" all of us are guilty of at one time or another, and consequently the horrendous result of justifying our in-action in the face of injustice or need. then, redemption. not only for the "other", but for ourselves through an act of kindness. not much to critique... great piece.
Flash Fiction / The Dock by the Lake
i think this is agood start. there are onconsistencies in dialogue used by corey, too sharp a conrast from "teenage" talk to: "Calm and quiet, yet unexplainably dynamic.....this lake parallels your exquisiteness.” seems a bit hard to believe corey would speak in this manner. spelling, punctuation and grammar need some attention. all in all; it's a lovely romance in bloom. with a little work, it could be a very nice read, indeed.