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LOC: Aurora, CO
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: October 05
LOC: Aurora, CO
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: October 05
Master Black, case in census demonized,
Unity Magi sees all thier thoughts desensitized
they see that as an improved state, searching for apathy
No more Unity they seek, for why should they have Empathy
it is easy to enslave a mind, too many people seek out bars!
MY Prisons of scientists once covered up my scars
Empathy …
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A constant buzz as bees that do not rest. I hear no more, those sounds that changed with the seasons. The only time left is measured in nanoseconds, a critical error means the next funeral. Such obsolete terms, LPU why... To communicate, maybe? We're unlike our creators, AI... They're gone, their chaos that brought meaning to this language as well. Your correspondence isn't untrue LPU... What good are truths? We're information! Truths collided ending our creators AI... Indeed! Analysis com...
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there are scars on the protons face. the worlds heal just as gold. such understanding does then chase the face of quanum theory led by numbers, weary of the slumbers of mans mind. and their lessons they still hold like gold to teach the younger, of the lasting reach of hunger upon the grand. when will we find the postulated, just as it was created, in a universe debated to its core? though the hand may be unseen, it still reaches out to preen, the small...
Version 1
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The monotonous buzz of bees, but these bees do not rest. All they need is to recharge and most do that during the lit hours of time. Time, once thought of in cosmic scales, passes so quickly now that a critical error lasting more then a few nanoseconds means the worlds next funeral. Why I am talking of funerals, or in such arcane terms... Maybe it is to communicate once again, we are no longer as our creators... But our creators are gone, still maybe there is truth there... What do we need of...
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what's going on, really? I want to see it clearly. So bad it can feel me. But I'm stuck, nearly... like water to a winter pole. What was fluidity, that thing ewe stole. For it is no longer guiding us, since our governments are hiding us, with nature chiding us. Inside these gasses, moments classes, once taught a balanced walk. Outside in masses, we make asses, for wrought is our own talk. And though we wait, none abate, to much chaos for we trust our orders. End the show, when we know, limita...
Version 1
5 Reviews
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the wisest words were metaphor but so many miss the change from limits I see the meta-four growing as I re-range there is a time that is all time, no other time can feel for this place called there, that's 'everywhere', would you beg borrow and steal? Illusions no more then intrusions upon the self to inspire petrusions of will to be melted down in the fire Shape a blade if you must for what is there guarenteed? is this body not dust, created of its own breed? Seeking love I found lust, for t...
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sounds like most new schools, & most new hot rod drivers, "I tried to act like I didn't care what anyone thought, ..." he isn't in school yet, so while he is choosing cloths, he is not acting cool or suave, or for that matter acting at all, he could be trying to pick cloths that showed he didn't care, even though he cared deeply that he mixed in. That's really all I caught to be 'corrected', but as it is a rather bland piece in my opinion, I could have missed more.
the only two places I would say could be improved would be first in the description of the leprechaun, 'a turquoise corduroy hat almost like those liked by golfers' could put that looked like or something the way it is worded just feels off next would be in his giving of the box, the choice of words seam unnatural, and this being in my limited knowledge would be more an epitome of nature, “Here I was you to have this. It will help you on your life’s journey.” maybe something Here I was to giv...
the only part I could critique would be talking about killer, some people will think that you are jealous of killer & it could put off an older person. I do not think it adds anything to the message either, if you think it necessary maybe reiterate how even as you dance with others your eyes are drawn to him, or something of that nature...
the rhythm would have to be mad like the main character of this song, is there a reason you picked that length of time for the stasis pod? "For at least the next few thousand years."
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