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is the hardest thing to do in the puzzle of Life. When you think you have all the pieces together and have figured it out, someone or something comes around and scatters all the pieces knocking them all over the place, forcing you to start over again. Or maybe you are almost done but you're still missing that one piece, the piece that cannot be ignored, the piece you need to make it complete whole. Life is one giant puzzle. It's one huge mess to begin with but after putting it all together, t...
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Every time I look outside, I see everything that passes me by. I see all the things that came to be. I remember all the wars, attacks, and fights, and all of the buildings with dark lights. I cry for the things I see. I try to see the children of war, hiding in dark rooms trying to forget what they saw, trying to remember the light of day. I see the innocent crawling low, trying to escape the frightening foe. Escaping to a lonesome place, to remember, the light of day. I think to myself, "Whe...
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Poetry / She must be
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She must be the luckiest girl in the world having you by her side, with only a glance to sustain myself. She must mean the world to you, or else your eyes would not be as bright as they are when she calls you on the phone. There must be something about her that makes you feel like you're on cloud nine and gives you that amazing smile. When she cries, she can count on your strong arms and gentle voice to be there to chase the tears away. I can imagine you wondering what she is doing right now....
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That's what you were, but it wasn't your fault. It was out of our hands a long time ago. Sometimes it killed me to know that every smile and twinkle of your eyes could make the darkest of days seem like sunshine. But I know better now. I wasn't meant to bring you the happiness you truly deserved. I will still take your hand for the last dance. I will still sit with you to watch the sunset. But I can never be with you because you were too good to be true.
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Poetry / In the fray
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Among the ruins of a place I once knew, you were taken a long time ago. I would have tried to save you, but I didn't know how. Somewhere between the bitterness of uncertainty and light of truth, I lost you. I wasn't planning on everything falling through the cracks in this broken world we wanted to fix. Heaven forbid, we would die alone and never find out why. Always wishing for the best to come, we realized that we could only have and never keep hold of tomorrow. For now, you're not here in ...
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Poetry / Death inspires
I really liked the flow of your poem. It's cool how you picked death as a theme and turned it to something positive. I liked the line how "love is at its highest/ in the hour of mourning." That's so true. One part that confused me is when you say "our" at the end, do you mean your old love or this new one? Very powerful last line.
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Where exactly are you going with your poem? I really liked the last line because it is true. I also liked the first line. I just don't know how it all connects.
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I found your poem really hard to follow. Maybe because of punctuation but what do you mean by "lost of sand/ they meet the gaze, rapt and sharp. Or "to fill silver diamond etched chalice/ to brood, amassed in dark stone halls" Also, is that really how you spell Moslems? I thought it was Muslims. I like the religious theme of your poem. I also like how you put the directions of east and west in there for a simple contrast. Is the poem meant to bring the two faiths together?
Poetry / Headed South
I really didn't mind the rhyming. It was actually pretty good. Some things that bothered me was the lack of punctuation. It blends in lines I don't think should like A few that profit watch us bleed/ On 9/11 for horrific hours. It might confuse some people. Maybe lowercasing some of the beginning letters might help if you don't want to add periods. I still don't see how your poem fits your title? What do you mean by "Headed South"?
Poetry / She Fell Away
Amazing work! Wow, I can definitely feel the emotion coming from this piece. Such a sad but true ending. Very descriptive, especially about her heart. Reminds me of those sad times. I also liked the way you continued the "of a heart" lines in the following stanza. Again, great piece with good emotion.
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