blackrosemage's profile
AGE:
18
LOC: United States
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 01
LOC: United States
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 01
My writing revolves around fantasy, but I hold no limitations as to what I may write. My heart, mind, and soul team up together and decide what is to be expressed on paper. I will leave it in one’s judgment whether or not it is decent, but I would appreciate any feedback. I indite because my friends and family have confidence in me which has summoned forth my own. They say it’s not a matter of “if” but a matter of “when”. I hope that I can have some sort of effect on some of you or vice versa. Maybe, one day my works will deserve merit and publication. I may eventually post my novel ideas/chapters on here, but as of now, I feel uncomfortable with that idea.
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Truth Mysterious justice twisted and concealed, Breaking through the inner self Blinded yet feels rejected Who sometimes experiences warmth, dwindling among the darkness, relief when told A chest buried in the sands of one's heart can lead to dishonesty, rejection, and concealment Truth accomplishes trust, loyalty, and overcomes liars Appealing to others Truth never wants to be pushed aside like a stray cat or constantly losing allies day by day, And seeks resident in a lost heart Truth requi...
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Overall, this is amazing. There was two things that caught my eye. I would suggest this line be slightly reworded, the flow feels uneasy. "Cause after you crack and break, you’ll know too late what was at stake." And in the future, could you possibly cut out some of those repetitive ratings/rankings.
The questions are good, emphasizing the truth behind the meaning. I don't know really how to respond but good luck with future poetry. It is slightly confusing, are you using a scenario about the real world in how people try to buy "love"? Or am I just completely off on this one? Sorry if I am off and I am just curious.
I agree with the majority of what you just stated. Personally, I DON'T ENJOY ANY POLITICS. I know it is necessary but there just seems to be an unfair aspect in any government. I know you focused on democracy and I can honestly say I don't know what will come of it yet I live where democracy is the government. Oh well great criticism and thought provoking language.
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