I like the imagery and word flow runs smoothly. This piece of writing pulls the reader in and I like how you began with the smoke and what smoke was welcoming, to then saying how he wanted to burn the place down but at the same time he hated man-made smoke. I like the irony. Overall, you did a great job. Thanks for a good read.

Overall, an amazing piece with deep emotion and thought. I love how you worded what you felt about her, using the halo to emphasize. I think you have talent, if my words count. = D But anyway, good luck with publishing. I didn't spot any error, but I am not a professional poet either.

Overall, a great vivid story, painting a beautiful picture (imagery-wise). Perhaps, with your story you mean that we all have a crazy side that needs mending? Or was it just that everyone sees others differently? I guess it could also mean that you have to look hard to see a person's true self? Anyway, amazing work. Keep it up. ~Suggestions: >"in back"--> be better to say "at table in the back"

The flow is amazing. I adore the style and tone. The poem shows emotion and I am sure has a good meaning. This poem uses good place of wording to emphasize emotion. Good luck with everything. The clarity of the poem is decent. But just because you have to read a poem more than once to see the meaning is not bad. It is actually good in my opinion, giving me a challenge than just seeing it the first go around. Do you mind explaining what your message is? I think I understand but what I feel it ...

This is very good with great word flow and word choice. This poem packs a powerful burst of energy that almost anyone can relate to, that we all have a journey to take that determines what is important to us and that we all do things we are not proud of, but learn from. Although this may not be what it truly means to you (which if you don't mind to tell me that would be great too), but this is what I found through the first read. I love the ending "looking through a colorless lens" and how yo...

I think you should add something about the nightmares at end. I don't know why but I feel it would be better this way and this is only a suggestion. But otherwise, amazing job!

Overall, I really like the emotion and meaning within this song. Or the meaning I pick up. I hope and wish you the best luck with it. Suggestions: >For some reason I don't like this line, flow wise or something "You threw a lifeline, fought with all you might." I think it is the lifeline part I don't fancy. The flow in the beginning of the sentence seems odd. Also, I would like to see the strong imagery you used at beginning of the particular stanza. This is just a suggestion. Thanks. Rati...

Overall this is a great piece. I question whether you are addressing the world as a whole or just that person at times or both? I like how you or it appears you address readers with "Never seen it like that?" It brings emphasis and made me to continue reading. It is like you were trying to look into all minds. I don't know what you want readers to see but I see it as we all try to strive to have the best when in general the small gifts that we have or that people give to us are the better gif...

The only thing I can say is wow. The sad thing is it is true. So far at least...Good rhyming and flow throughout.

Overall it is good with rhyming. I understand what you are doing, I just didn't know about the doctor thing. But all in all, written well.