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AGE:
54
LOC: Seattle, WA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: July 20
LOC: Seattle, WA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: July 20
Pretty new to writing poetry but I enjoy it.
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Never expect anyone to be more chariatable, than you are.
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You've boxed me in Your four sided words conform Your one sided actions restrict Mind thinking in corners You've boxed me in
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Growing up in Iowa, held some wonderful memories for me, and some of those memories have become as magical now, as they were in my childhood. I recently took a trip back to my childhood home last summer. To see people that I havent seen in 35 years, since I was 14, is strange to say the least. Our house sat at the end of a long gravel drive, nestled between a modest urban sprawl and a farmers field. Behind the field was a tree line, that is a common sight in the midwest, offering the fields ...
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I have a photograph of myself, when I was three, sitting on Marsha Lundy's lap. I was in black and white then, not only in the photo, but in the clarity of wrong and right. I don't remember Marsha Lundy, but, as far as my mother was concerned, Marsha was one of the greatest influences of my life. I followed her everywhere, she was my hope, my guiding light, my mentor. I don't remember, you, Marsha Lundy, but I feel enriched for having known you. But now I am grown, I wipe my own nose, my sho...
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If I had but one thing I could have in my life, just one single thing I could wish for, it would be good.
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I liked the story overall, just a few nits. When spoeaking of the door jamb, for some reason that term bothered me. When I think of injury I think of flesh and bone not wood. Maybe damage would be a better word. I really liked the way described the problems and how he built them up, as I think we all have a habit of doing that. Our problems are as big as we make them and many are solved through discomfort. Good job on this
Ow, this brought up some memories that were better left buried. I like your descriptions here. Sad but very effective, but I've heard that the needle is the vacation for the poor and desperate. Thanx for the read.
This is a good start for a poem, but I would cut down on some of the abstractions and streamline this a bit. For instance, in L1 S2, instead of The pulse in my head continues............I would change to Pulses in my head continue....just to name one Anyways, this has a good write in there. Good luck to you.
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