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Look into my eyes.
Can you see my soul?
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I try to be what you want me to be. But I'm tired of living with this fake facade. You ask what's wrong and I say nothing. I can't explain it in words. This feeling is torture and eats me alive! Please tell me now, when will it stop? When will I be relieved? I've been pulled under and now I can't breathe. Help me get back to the top! I tell you I'm hurting and you just stay silent. Are you listening or am I just wasting my breath? I need some comfort and you are not helping. Why can't you jus...
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We're all players in this three ring circus...just waiting to be discovered. So put on your makeup and your shiny red dress. Master your song and master your dance. Give the performance of a lifetime and make sure you impress.
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Addiction is a bad word. Especially for the addicted.
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The dark lonely night is mocked by your silence. And still you sleep. You sleep. The stars have been put to bed and the man in the moon is dreaming. And still you sleep. You sleep. The dawn awakes and the sun drinks his coffee. But you're not here. Not here.
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I enjoyed reading your piece. You opened up yourself and let the reader into your life for a moment. You are a very talented writer. However, I did notice a couple of places where you could have punctuated a little better. One in particular, "I read all the theory. I applied it in lesson plans. I observed many excellent teachers practice. But I never grasped the truth of it – until I started working at the Phoenix." Maybe instead of using so many periods you could use commas or semicolons. I ...
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You did a wonderful job of making the reader feel what you are experiencing. The sense of hope, then the crushing reality of rejection. I love the last 2 lines. To me, they are the most powerful of the whole piece. Nicely done. Please share more!
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I love this! I can just see one word in my mind creating so many images. Nicely done!
This was a good piece. You did a wonderful job of conveying your pain. I wasn't quite sure where "It’s just not fair" fits in, however. With some minor editing this could be a great piece. Thank you for sharing! Please keep writing!
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