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LAST LOGIN: October 08
LAST LOGIN: October 08
I am a graduate of Lock Haven University Of Pennsylvania, where I majored in Communications / Journalism and Public Relations. I have spent most of my career in law enforcement, however one of my hobbies is writing. I have had a few poems published in collections from contest entries in the last two years. I joined Urbis to get more exposure to my writing and hopefully find assistance in improving and expanding my writing skills. Eventually, I hope to leave something behind my mortal life in print form.
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What happened to us, where did it all go? I have no feelings like before, now it’s all a show. It’s not a real mystery. I’ve seen it before. Been there, done that...same view from the door. It looks bright and sunny outside and so dark within, But I’m held back with a fear of beginning again. It’s too hard to leave, but harder to stay Make things better? Don’t know what I can say. Now I’m ready to go, “rule the world“ I’m thinking; But, I’ve found it’s tough already and I feel myself sinking....
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Tangled thoughts Over the Winter Queen, As she walks in bitter cold memories. I have found no warmth In together-future dreams. Ending love and desire; Passion left in freeze.
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The skyline glows with a rusty haze, While the smoke billows from a growing blaze. In the station, the siren cuts through the peaceful hush. Everyone comes alive in an organized rush Down to the trucks and donning their gear, They leave behind warm beds, dreams and even their fear. Race down the street; ‘round the corner and through the light, Each one prepares mentally for the coming fight. At the scene there is chaos and confusion by all Except for those arriving to answer the call. Like a ...
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I can't seem to find the happiness that once was mine. And I can't believe that my joy was really just a lie. Made up in my mind as a shelter from life's pain Like a mental umbrella in a pouring rain. Was it friendship or love...confidence or pride; Maybe faith in higher powers from which I now shade my eye. I wish I knew, so I could have it again. I'm a caterpillar with a chrysalis of sin. No certainty, that the transformation in mind Will match the beauty of a butterfly!
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3 am highway cold and alone no hurry to get back no one waiting at home radio stations play my friend no future beyond the headlight's end maps in hand routes carefully set a detour sends me reeling and I haven't found my way yet nothing is familiar the broken road a torment not sure if this, my life's drive is a blessing or just punishment
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Overall, I liked the imagery. In the notes, you indicate it expresses a dream of someone perfect but ultimately unattained. The poem does not feel as cynical as indicated but seems almost more of a reminiscent memory than a dream of something that never happened. I didn't like the use of the word "spoon" and I think it detracts from the overall image and seems out of place. I would suggest a line like 'Like vines intertwined, lovers together' instead of "When we spoon, lovers together"
You have very good use of imagery, but not sure that I like it as a poem. It has a lot of elements that could be developed more or added into a story.
I liked the undertones of desperation and monotony in the banal life of the home-maker. I see it radiating out into her whole existance yet oblivious to the one she loves with a "lemon-fresh" polish of satisfaction.
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It sounds interesting and a very complex underpinning to a novel. It could be developed into an epic along the lines of some of J R R Tolkein’s writing. As a stand alone piece of poetry it is too cryptic and vague to make much sense. I can’t criticize much about the lack of punctuation, as my poetry is mostly devoid of it as well, but here I had trouble trying figure out what was what. I think a few breaks of punctuation may help to clear it a little. Its more a poetic riddle. I hope you cont...
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