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AGE: 23
LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: April 18

I am a student and I live in Manchester. I spend a lot of time worrying, drinking and enjoying myself. My other passions include football, activism, writing, French, reading and music. We have a very regular bus service here and the city is absolutely alive. I don’t have much else interesting to say. The more I learn, the less I know and it all becomes quite perplexing. So maybe I will just wait to see what comes of it.

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A pair of sandals left on a beach. That is all I have left of her. You wouldn’t exactly call them solitary, for there are two of them; but nonetheless they appear alone, yet somehow content, against the flat, smooth and perfectly untouched ripples of sand on which they sat. I can recall exactly how they appear, and the backdrop, for I have a photograph of them. A friend of mine was at the time working for the local newspaper, doing a work experience with the news photographer. He stole a copy...
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The click of the lightswitch, and the subsequent flooding of light penetrating through his eyelids, awoke him. The unnaturally bright, artificial glare roused him prematurely from his slumber and made him feel as if he had been violently shaken awake, eliciting an early morning groan. The type of groan that wants more sleep but knows that it will be not forthcoming. He sat upright in the stiff bed and rubbed his eyes, looking around himself with a slight expression of surprise in his eyes: fo...
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Short Story / The Surrender
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A middle aged man walked through the darkened street, passing the closed curtains and dim lights of the old and tall Victorian houses. They stood tall and imposing, with peeling paint on the old brick blocks beneath their long windows, and sheltered their inhabitants from the uncertainty of the outside. The dirty amber glow of the towering street lights threw its light pollution into the starless sky, providing a rhythm as he walked on and giving the impression of unclean pearls illuminating ...
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Short Story / Kite
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The grating sound of someone clumsily trying to force a key into the lock of the door and taking several unsuccessful attempts in doing so stirred her prematurely from sleep and she felt that familiar pang of resentment and irritation. He staggered in, noisily, almost tripping over a pair of shoes on the floor and started to undress. He was drunk again. ‘Hey love,’ he just about managed to articulate, unbalanced on his feet. ‘Can we have a chat? Sorry I’m late in’, he added as an apologetic c...
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I much prefer letters to anything That has been electronically sent The realness of the smudges in the ink And the cheap recycled paper That I can imagine has been close to you, Privy to that touch which I so covet Your sparse words are the trickling Of a teasing tap in the middle of the night That refuses to be turned off Each one a secret covenant, a reminder For only me From you, half a world away. Thats something to which I must turn. I can't imagine what you must be doing now; Exotic ima...
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I have several criticisms of this piece. Firstly, even though it is under the genre of short story, I cannot discern any direction in which the narrative is taking the story (if there is one). You jump from internal monologue and then between two different conversations without any narrative transition which links them together. Similarly with the tone and mood, there are many improvements which can be made. I do like the confessional and open nature of the piece, but I feel that you give too...
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Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Missing
I like the stream of consciousness style you use here. The guarded suggestions you make without ever explicitly giving away the secrets makes me want to read on. There is a great rhythm, evoking almost that of when one reads a book. You have achieved quite a mature and thoughtful tone already in your writing, which works particularly well here as an internal monologue. I found the circular ending, concluding the piece with the image of a book, to be very effective. Your use of hyphons is some...
I find the description of the characters through their likes and dislikes and habits to be charming and also very effective. Many writers fail to realise such power which can be harnessed through the minute and seemingly unimportant detail. Your sentence structure could be improved. Whilst the use of commas and subordinate clauses has the effect in some sentences of creating a oratory rhythm, in other points it makes it seem a bit sloppy. Personally I would retain those which you think most i...
Again another very promising installment of the Hamiri series. This is a very original and interesting way of creating a realistic premise upon which you can base her following, more surreal and fantastical adventures. A prequel as it were is a great way of generating not only interest for the reader like myself who is already familiar with her adventures, but also a good way of introducing new readers. The tone you immediately establish is one which lets me know that something serious has or...
Short Story / The Adventures of Hamira
These adventures of Hamira represent a brilliant idea which you make into something marvellous. I reviewed your piece yesterday involving Hamira in the swimming pool. I am struck by many promising signs, but if I am honest, you have quite a way to go yet. This piece achieves its very fundamental aim of being a comedy. You are adept at throwing us little quips and one liners that we don't see necessarily coming and your ideas are interestingly quirky. Now some substantive criticism. The first ...
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