the imagery was really wonderful. My intial reaction I like how it went from the realization of a dream to going back into a dream at the end. I really liked the Dripping Pen line. and what you said about it flowing from within. there is truth here. Consider going a bit deeper and really pointing this talent toward something. Poetry can be used to really exaplin somehting that cant be explained through linear thought. I see talent here. I would now like to see your message.

I was a little confused with the message you were trying to convey in this piece. Maybe the rhyme took precendence over content here a little. I did like some of the word pairings but I found that some of the message underneath the words was muddled. Over all I found it to be fair Keep it up!

It was pleasent to read. Or Used To Become Free As A Book On A Shelf these lines lost me a little. Puncuation would be important here to keep your thoughts together. It ouwl allow the reader to really hear what you are saying. Dig deeper I think. Keep it up :)

this was utterly unique and disterbingly entertaining in a very odd way. I like the raw, unashamed and almost crude pictures you painted. Viseral and like nothing I read before. I wondered if it is all in his head or if she was infact there with him.. eitherway though, she was with him i guess.

are broke and poor the same thing? I like the message though.

the imagery in this is almost tactile. So vividly you painted with words. My favorite lines are "The emptiness on the other side is complimented by the scenery." and "A cold and quiet evening breeze fosters silence with a loud intensity, and the definition of this perception makes one question its authenticity." This piece is riddled with irony, cleverly written and enjoyable to read.

had to pull out the dictionary for this one ;) What I took away from this is that the character in the story is searching through their mind for words to paint the picturs indwelling. The marrage of fine art concepts with the written is captivating. Perhaps the character sees what needs to be on the paper and through editing finds that nothing need be said in the end. that the journey took place in the mind without the need for words at all. perhaps that is what is meant by "I write the paper...

I think this describes being pinched or the idea of pinching someone really well. I question the use of the ":" In this case I guess u are using it for summation. I like the choice of words. Its possible you could find a more colorful word in place of comes that would really speak to your point.