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HE WAS THREE Announcer: Our story opens in 1943 Kansas City where we once again find our hero engaged in a classic struggle between perceived Good and Evil. Since our last visit, Larry’s mother has produced another child, a sister, and because of ‘female complications’ has been confined to bed rest by her physician. Unable to properly care for her nearly three year old precocious son, her parents have agreed to care for him at their farm twenty miles away in the country. ...
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Well, you set us up for cheesy and we got it. Way too much detail on setting and stage business. You never did get us to the problem. It was like an introduction that never ended. Cut out 80% of it and define plot. Could be a nice screenplay if developed thoroughly. Needs much more thought and planning. Sorry
You lost your credibility with me in the second paragraph. Please learn something about Asiatic imperialism which far predates your European citations. As I continued to labor through the piece, gaging on one fault-based assumption after the other, it became clear that you were driven by emotion, not knowledge, as you put this together. It appears that you did not throughly review your grammar and sentence structure before posting the article. Please do so now. Your sentences are too long and...
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