carebeardna's profile
AGE:
40
LOC: Conroe, TX
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 22
LOC: Conroe, TX
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 22
I am a writer, poet, and children’s author. I am also a motivational speaker encompassing the topics of domestic violence, abuse and recovery. All can overcome.
I am here to lend an ear and voice to those who are also writers, poets and learning who they really are.
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Destiny’s Journey ~ Millennia departed Eternity crossed ~ knowledge imparted Soul’s searching ~ Fates intertwined Restless spirits ~ Universe shined Lifetimes searched ~ Distance breached Chasms climbed ~ Oceans beached Wounds massed ~ Force unyielding Bodies broken ~ Karma shielding Infinite space ~ Intersect Divine Exhale relief ~ Serendipitous sign Veil removed ~ Vision clear Essence rejoices ~ Soul-mate near Heads spinning ~ Hearts afire Winds changing ~ Wild desire Beautiful words ~ Beck...
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Let me come to you so that I may know you; the way a stream knows the earthen bed over which it surges. Allow me to drift over you; at times gently ebbing along, caressing every curvature and other times torrentially racing and rushing over your banks. Let me flood you with all that I am so that you may know me in full. With every ebb and flow, every wave and crest; know me. Let me know you the way the gracious oak’s roots know the fertile soil it embraces. Grant me reach deep within you and ...
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Full Moon Rising God given ~ Right divine Heady scent ~ Love sublime Waxing phases ~ Moonlight high Impassioned lovers ~ Midnight sky Animal kingdom ~ Savage lore Spring’s tide ~ Hypnotic shore Nature’s rhapsody ~ Tractive force Lunar wildness ~ No remorse Temerarious suitor ~ Enchanted peri Together intertwine ~ Soul’s marry Unabashed lust ~ Human beasts Reckless desires ~ Bodily feasts Heaven’s witness ~ Amazing glory Sultry adoration ~ Love’s story
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I enjoyed this poem especially as one who has a son... For balance consider breaking the final stanza into 2 with an addional line after "...more special than before". There's plenty of opportunity for a line there. Nice work! Boys ARE awesome! Always, ~B
Okay, ask for a refund now because what I am about to say is of NO value whatsoever. LOL! What a great rant! I think we could have a very long and healthy discussion about anything and enjoy it to the ends of the earth. So, are you a coal miner, a cop, a vet or gay? LMAO! I am so not serious because it doesn't really matter. Very few humans are capable parents, did you have any because I know I didn't. OMG, this almost sounds harsh but I truly don't mean it to. I love your piece and I pray yo...
I loved it! Your playful banter between your duality is a great concept. While Urbis limits the artist to just words, you could really play this up using line breaks and switching from caps to lower case in words alone, i.e. "pRobLeM with tHAt". It gives the reader more insight to the querkiness of the personalities you're coping with. LOL. I really did enjoy this, it's good to know I'm not alone. Geez, I hope this helps in some random way. Blessings, ~DNA~
Good beginning of a short. You've built up the back story a bit, created interesting characters and a bit of mystery. Dialog is tough for many writers so as you develop skill, it will become easier. You seem very much like the main character, a bit uneasy about dialog and the story direction (talking and where the day will take you). You'll get there and you're well underway. You've got a few typos but that's an easy fix with spell checker. You asked about the readers feelings, so far I like ...
Powerful and moving. Thank you for writing this. The voice of this piece sounds like that of a child and yet it's ownership of mental illness rings true. Anyone who has loved a mentally ill person knows of this dichotomy that you simply and clearly expressed. The only item that I questioned was page 3 of 7, the line "It did smell like hospitals , or crumble like a plastic cup in my hand". Was this to read "It did not..." as you were referring to the rain? That was the only issue I take note o...
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