I liked this. The heavy amount of dialogue works well for a prologue, it keeps the reader interested and keeps things moving. I loved the beginning, it hooked me on the story and made me want to find out more. I don't think the same can be said for the prologue in it's entirety though - it works as a well rounded short story, but it didn't introduce the character enough for me to want to find out what happens next. Your use of humour at the end provides a snappy, well polished finish. Perhaps...

I loved this. Sharp, snappy, straight-to-the-point. I laughed aloud when I read 'Soft serve / and evil'. The piece has a nice balance of message and humour. It works well in the format, I think. I'm trying to think of something contructive to say to help you improve but I don't think you have much of a need for that - if you were writing like this seven years ago, you're probably pretty damn good now, too.

Entertaining! I enjoyed this immensely. It makes sense to write about something that other writers can relate to. Funny yet so honest - that, to me, makes a great blogging piece. Nice effort.

I wonder if you've considered the audience that would read your writing on this site. I understand what you're trying to say, sure, but I wanted more - I wanted to see another angle, another shade so it's not just 'them = bad' throughout. Flatmates can be a pain, I know - perhaps being more creative with what you write about them might be a form of revenge? As they say, the pen is mightier than the sword!

This made me smile. I love the clever manipulation of language and the delightful puns. The last stanza bothered me, though. It was clever but didn't really seem to fit in with the rest of the poem, which let the whole piece down.

You've done a great job at capturing the lightweight-yet-relevant tone used in the sort of place where you want the piece to be published. I could see it being published in the magazines that come with newspapers, for sure. I love the sarcasm used here - "this happened only six or seven times, so it’s hardly worth mentioning" - is a great line. I did, after a while, become tired with the 'LAC' abbreviation. Why not use the country's name? Calling your partner 'copilot' is great because it h...

This made me smile, I'm sure many here can relate! This piece does all the things flash fiction should: it's snappy, humourous, has a meaningful side, and is a well-rounded snippet of a larger story. The last line was my favourite part. It felt like the perfect ending: not too much, but gets the point across.

I didn't find it that amusing, to be honest. It it styled as an accusation almost; the tone implied by the word 'secret' feels smug. I understand the sentiment of this memoir but I don't think the words used really do the idea justice.

Finally, a six-word memoir with a bit of grit! This is really refreshing after reading too many that are over-generalised, angsty or lifeless. This is certainly not lifeless - the words are full of passion and emotion, and I really enjoy that. Something makes this really magical, something that feels like assonance but isn't. I can't find the words to describe it. Anyway, stunning effort.