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LOC: Stockton, NJ
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So coldly did I bear it Cowardly at best I struck at stares so violently The lips that curled in jest And anxiously I hastened My fast unyielding breaths As panic trounced the villain Beating in my chest So glaringly defiant My tear ducts welled in spite Of my great undertaking To hold the tears from flight The salty manifestation Of my nervous tendencies Overcame my hands in fists That begged for a reprieve So cold the stare of strangers But worse the scoff of friends Adolescent dangers To t...
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me?... i like fast songs with loud hooks and sudden endings. she... she likes calm songs with beautiful lyrics... we think of our lives from peach skies in hindsight it's all breathtaking. dotted lines cross us but we know this road is ending. we realize. well i do. that our time is passing quickly i'm thinking clearly while she's trapped in believing. it's almost september in my mind and for reasons i can't explain i'm tempted to end my life not physical suicide but mental detachment so noth...
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A death from above, the bridge's wires break. Not to fall to the depths of some dark sea, But to be taken up to some holier place we have made, Unless we are inclined not to believe. Disclosed to the masses we are designed to seek and be comforted by the Power at hand. But, what is Power, if not strength enough to stand Independent, all-knowing of a separate universe, One concealed in the living soul, One derived by a multitude of failed attempts and trivialized roles? Three truths: reason, ...
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i stood in front of myself watching my chest expand and contract wishing that breath would somehow turn into acceptance turning away from myself i saw what you had left me as this skin that wraps my body only serves to remind me of my weakness my hesitance to not give in i sat wasted in silence vanishing into my body where i searched for signs of life i was empty inside empty like you, like the rest of them i took a picture of myself capturing my moment of sickness i dropped to my knees the ...
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You take my hand and we point to the sky, Your hand over mine, With simpler words I explain. That burning of a light, Thats spent its past few years, Looking for a room to brighten, To cast shadows above window sills, Makes sense now. We have taken over this forgotten patch of earth. Its ours for the night. As we sit and point towards heaven, And burn our flames, Imitating fireflies. Like burning veins with oxygen, We speak through our eyes. The beacons of truth beckoning to be lied to, A si...
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i love this quote. i don't usually give reviews that are all positive, but i have to say that this quote is perfect in every way. it's a very compelling argument, true and succinct. i never thought of our past present and future in that context, but now that i have seen this quote, i see time in a whole new light and that is what makes a good quote. opening peoples eyes to a different perspective. making them broaden their view. this quote is very special. bravo!
my personal feeling is that you start the poem off very strong. you captured my attention, but i found my interest slowly waning after the second stanza. the idea of the poem is excellent. the message is strong and universal, but the third through eighth stanzas lack the depth the first two have. the first stanza works because it has a theme, body image, and it is carried throughout the entire stanza. you began to do this in the third stanza as well, taking an theme and elaborating on it. i t...
my first word of advice: try to include the genre of music the song is intended for in your notes. you came off with a good start but i have to say the song begins to lack substance in the third verse and it all goes downhill from there. its such a shame to have such great lyrics to start and then you slowly digress, but i find this happens to me a lot and in other lyrics i have reviewed as well. i think you need to put a bit more work into the end of the song. the words begin to seem cliche ...
this poem is a lot of fun. the story is quite humorous and you successfully brought life to your character and his story which is not an easy thing to do. the only thing i question is some of the rhyming.. i think there are a few times where it just isnt right and makes it difficult to read. i really did enjoy this piece. you have a great sense of humor and a wild imagination. keep up the good work.
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i'm sorry to say that, as a short story, it was rather anticlimactic. you got my attention at the beginning, i was drawn in by the creativity and the clever turn of phrase, but after the first paragraph i soon grew tired waiting for something to happen. the story is about you losing your virginity, but you devote so little explanation of the actual act. i'm not saying you should go into explicit detail of the act itself, i'm sure people can imagine, but i think you need to add more. what? i d...
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