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AGE: 29
LOC: Herlong, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: March 23

I admit to being dense in the area of grammar and punctuation. I blame it on the terrible, and I do mean terrible, school that I went to growing up.  Although I am deficient in my grammar skills I love to write. Actually it’s more of a love hate relationship but it’s something that I have to do.  For now I’m sticking to the children’s market. Picture books to be more specific, because I can be as big and giddy as I want to in that genre.

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Version 1
14 Reviews   5 Comments
Arthur worked hard from the earliest part of the day until the sun set way down low in the sky. Every night he was terribly tired. Up the porch steps he climbed. Out went the lights and into bed he plopped. “Sleep at last.” Arthur mumbled as he closed his tired eyes. Cha-cha-cha. Cha-cha-cha, screech, Arthur stirred a little in his sleep but he did not wake up. Scratch, scratch. Croak and a twang, twang. Arthur sat straight up in his bed. Pitter-patter could be heard. Arthur threw on the lig...
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Children's / Dance No More Eleanor
Version 6
13 Reviews   12 Comments
Eleanor danced right out of bed every morning and right back into it every single night. Every morning she would twirl onto the kitchen table to take her pancakes for a whirl. She danced up a terribly enormous bubble storm in the tub and gyrated while brushing her teeth. Getting dressed was quite the event with tumbles, a few swirls and a quick twirl. Eleanor did not walk to school but she did do quite a wonderful waltz. “This street is always so jammed,” she thought as she danced through a ...
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Children's / Dance No More Eleanor
Version 5
2 Reviews   2 Comments
Eleanor danced right out of bed every morning and right back into it every single night. Every morning she would twirl onto the kitchen table to take her pancakes for a whirl. She danced up a terribly enormous bubble storm in the tub and gyrated while brushing her teeth. Getting dressed was quite the event with tumbles, a few swirls and a quick twirl. Eleanor did not walk to school but she did do quite a wonderful waltz. “This street is always so jammed,” she thought as she danced through a s...
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Children's / Dance No More Eleanor
Version 4
2 Reviews   1 Comment
Eleanor danced right out of bed every morning and right back into it every single night. Every morning she would twirl onto the kitchen table to take her pancakes for a whirl. She danced up a terriablly enormous bubble storm in the tub and gyrated while brushing her teeth. Getting dressed was quite the event with tumbles, a few swirls and a quick twirl. Eleanor did not walk to school but she did do quite a wonderful waltz. “This street is always so jammed,” she thought as she danced through ...
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Children's / If I had My Cup
Version 3
15 Reviews   7 Comments
Jake desperately inched his itty-bitty fingers along the kitchen counter reaching for his cup. He stood on the very tips of his toes, and stretched, groaned and wiggled his little fingers forward. It was no use; he couldn’t reach. Jake grumbled, mumbled, and stomped his feet. He was so frustrated that he could have stomped around all day. But he didn’t. He stopped grumbling, and he stopped mumbling, and even stopped stomping his feet. He stood up tall and declared, “If I had my cup I would t...
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and protection by drug dealers in the black community. - by is used when we are talking about a the creator of a production of some type, like this story is written 'by' a white girl. Try the word through in place of by. and has got me to where I’m at today. -has got me to____would be fine if a noun filled the blank. try- and have gotten me where I am today. all very true and some cases horribly graphic. - and 'in' some... I am frequently myspace.com, yahoo, and others on the internet reading...
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through a career as an optician, and through three children’s childhood. Childhood is singular here even though you are speaking of three childhoods. Try and through the childhood of three children. I know that sometimes I am not even in the writing as I put the first draft together. - it is impossiable to 'be in the writing' unless you are a charcther that is part of what is being written. Try, I am not into the writing.... or I can not get into the first draft.
Non-fiction / Universal
to tell me there are only one baby in there. - improper use of 'are' Try, to tell me there was only....
Great query. Really fun and you say a lot with few words which is great as editors are busy. To make yourself seem more marketable talk about your platform a bit. Are you part of any groups, do you take part in any public speaking engagements, and mention any relevant connections you have. For example I write children’s books so I might say, I have personal connections with six Educational Directors for the twelve schools in my county. I speak at two to four schools a month to promote reading...