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Hi there! I like the article even though I hadn't read the previous chapter. My main criticism would be that there seems to be too many words ie why use to when one would do. Also, what was the nature of his mental illness? If it was from some sort of psychosis what caused it? Was it a case opf post traumatic stress disorder that he was hospitalised for. Whatever the reason for his hospitalisation, make sure you do some research into the illness as a0 it would make for better reading, b0 it w...

I take i that this piece is aimed at children/adolescents. So far so good. Good luck with it

I am not a great fan of poetry so you may accept or disregard anything I have to say.This poem speaks of the wonderful naivete of young love. It's free of anger and bitterness and speaks of pure accepting love. You are now 4 years older and as such you must have sxperienced more emotional growth. It would be nice to see that if you were to write another poem on your relationship, how you could reflect that love and emotion. I wish you luck with your coming wedding and hope you have enjoy a wo...