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AGE: 31
LOC: Australia
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 01

I’m a songwriter, been trying to write stories for ages, stuck with poetry cause it turned out to be quicker, then swapped to writing songs cause I’m a singer.

I hopefully will get some useful reviews of some of my stuff, and a feeling of having done something with the volumes of writing I have.

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Version 1
3 Reviews   2 Comments
Wish You Would Say Trudy Newell, 2003 verse You don't smile much anymore, there's just a glimpse of a grimace on your face when I tell the old familiar jokes we used to laugh about mmm verse I try to catch you at the door before you leave But you won't stop, you're getting on with your day You don't talk so much anymore, there's just that Civil little “Hello, how do you do” and then you're gone oh pre chorus / build And I'm talking to myself in an empty room Wanting you but you keep running a...
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Lyrics / it's a lush life
Version 3
2 Reviews   2 Comments
Still life, hot chai tea Just the trick when Things get to be A little too hectic Way too fast Slow down... give it up Soak it away, in a Nice, warm, LUSH! bath Quiet, sinking gotta chill, need a happy pill get to thinking things are swell chill out, give it up Soak it away in a nice, warm LUSH! bath I like late nights Party girl.. "look at me Feeling so Alright" A litle outrageous.. too much Sleep it off, soak it away in a Nice, warm LUSH! bath Don't feel pretty... not too perfect need to lo...
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Lyrics / it's a lush life
Version 2
0 Reviews   0 Comments
Still life, hot chai tea Just the trick when Things get to be A little too hectic Way too fast Slow down... give it up Soak it away, in a Nice, warm, LUSH! bath Quiet, sinking gotta chill, need a happy pill get to thining things are swell chill out, give it up Soak it away in a nice, warm LUSH! bath I like late nights Party girl.. "look at me Feeling so Alright" A litle outrageous.. too much Sleep it off, soak it away in a Nice, warm LUSH! bath Don't feel pretty... not too perfect need to lov...
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Version 2
3 Reviews   3 Comments
A Desire Within the measure Of another time and place I assume my fate. I've left incisions - Broken and discarded thoughts; Failed to follow through. Forgot to make sense, Made what was gracious unkind With a gestured thought. It all becomes small, Ritualistic cement Making me taller. A Pursuit Sleep abates once more Released from its tyranny To yet again roam. The truth will follow Another attempt at flight Relax, ride the hope... Unbridled passion Not forgotten, abandoned - Just leavened a...
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Version 1
7 Reviews   4 Comments
c. T.Newell, 2003 verse one I bet you never had a genuine problem, I bet you never thought it was uncommon To be living in perpetual comfort and style and i wonder if you ever took a moment To comprehend the genuine componets of your lifestyle are you sleeping as much as you should and I want just one minute of your time so I can try to explain my point of view to you I'll do my best to help you understand the way I do verse two Well I bet you never had to wait for nothing I could not imagine...
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Lyrics / Which way now?
The shadows of guilt hunt me everyday, they make me spill all the good within, really good lines. i like them alot. i have trouble figuring on the rhythm you use when i read the first verses, but after the first chorus, the stuff is really rhythmicly neat (apart from the word rebirth) i like some of the visual in your bridge, but i think it still needs a bit of a tune up.
Poetry / Music**
The staccato of snare snares us The staccato snare catches us ?? I liked the ideas in this poem, being a musician -- words and melody are my language. I think this piece is simple, but it works. A silence astounding, A noise unseen. Perfecting opposition is difficult, but I get your message loud and clear. I enjoyed the read.
Criticism / Dear Dissimilar
Do you want to hear that you're a great writer, or a crazy faithless lunatic..?? Well, you've done a great job in expressing something that's kinda close to my being as well... dissimilar never managed to use that word to describe god, but i love it. So dibs on that this is good writing in my small opinion, and coming from certifiable faithless lunatic, that's probably not much. Think spacing, though.
Short Story / Cannot Find Server
this is funny, ironic and fantastic. The title made me click, the scenario made me wince and the writing style made me laugh. say, dry.. I wasn't sure about the say, stopped me for a second. "dry , as hard as" maybe? some punctuation seems to be missing here. I think, forget it Love the ending -- love the irony. Good job.
Sci Fi & Fantasy / Legends of Old Karel Chapter 2
too bad i haven't read them in order, but if this were on the shelves I'd give it a read.. i like the intrigue.. waiters being spies and all.