Wow. This was really good. And as I read it, I could really picture two people loving each other... it sounds like something that would be played in a movie. The words seem promising. Hopeful. Peaceful. If sung gently, it could help me sleep at night! =]

This is very powerful. When I first started off reading it, my first thought was that it wasn't put together that well... that it was good, but not the best, you know? A bunch of words put together. But once it got past the chorus, grabbed my heart... it's heart-wrenching. Finding out that the mom and dad both dad caught me off guard in a way, and it sort of left a small pit in my stomach for a couple of seconds... but it was the very last part that really got to me. Saying that Kate's mom ne...

This was brilliantly written. And very deep, too... it has a lot of emotion to it. Though I've never been in love, never been in that type of situation, I can still relate to it... I've gotten really close to people, and a particular person that I've lost/been separated from. So the parts where you say stuff like one day it's here, then it's gone, too soon... really got to me. I'm sure anybody that has a mind and soul, and feels, can empathize here, and understand where you're coming from. Po...

Wow... this was really interesting. It makes a good prologue. Catches the reader off guard. At first, when I read the very first sentence for a second time, I thought that it was unnecessary. But once I saw it at the end, I realize that it was really creative, the way you used those words more than once... A nice start to what seems like can be a pretty good story... I'd be interested in reading the rest...

Sounds like something that could be turned into a rap song. I don't mean that in a bad way. It's unique. Though you didn't use capitalization everywhere, and words like "cuz" but other than that it was okay.

This was pretty powerful... really deep. It reached through to me, and spoke out to me, though I'm sure it had a different meaning for you. Lots of things have different meanings for different people, and I think this is one of them. I like the way you broke it up, too. Nicely written.

Hmm. This was pretty interesing. It was kind of unique. Things seemed to blend in a bit... maybe it was just me... but it was fine overall. You did seem to use Gabriel's name quite a bit... maybe you should try saying "he" a bit more, but this was good. Clean cut, nicely detailed and written.

I enjoyed this a bot because I suffer from depression and anxiety. I used to write stuff like this all the time, and still do, so I can relate to it. It's kinda dark, and I dunno... while reading it, I pictured somebody whispering it in the middle of the night, I don't know why. Just gave me that feeling, like at the beginning of a movie. Just my logic.. haha. But yeah.

Hmm.... unique, I can give you that. This was good, complicated... but good. Has a kind of flow to it..