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AGE:
54
LOC: Taunton, MA
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 20
LOC: Taunton, MA
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 20
i am a struggling lyric/songwriter writer …trying get a song published…it’s very difficult as you all know…any info/ideas or suggestions..feel free to send me a message….:)
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'"A CERTIFIED MANAIC" You push my mind to the brink My heart's hanging off a cliff And each night I say to myself When we scream and fight, what if...what if Chorus: I'm a certified maniac I'm a certified maniac A certified maniac Without a clue I'm a certified maniac &n...
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"Little Good Happens After Midnight" ...
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"Your Sons and Daughters" Children wander the streets Crying in pain from starvation People killing each other With such strong aberation Life has lost it's value And people don't seem to have a clue And they are, Your Sons and Daughters Yes they are, Your Sons and Daughters Everywhere in the world Life seems to be under seize By a subtle evil force Spreading like a fatal disease Like a fire in the forest A fire that can't be put to rest Started by, Your Son...
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"This Song's For You" (Michael) You gave the world song You gave us all dance As the world's greatest entertainer ...
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I know, you know, I know nothing about everything!
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hi there, i luv it!....:)...very tongue and cheek...excellant 4 worder....the only 10 i have ever given.....:) short and sweet as can be.......jim
hi there, quite deep...i'm not sure why it's call "thumbs" though, you have alot of good rhymes and good meter for a song...i think you need one more verse and need to make it a bit more clearer for any listener to understand..having simplicity and orginality is very hard but this is a good start..remember..all songs have a begining/middle and end...hope to read you again..jim
hi, well it seems like it would make a very good rap song...alot of crisp catchy lines to go along with all those great rhymes....but it looks like you got tired at the end or 2nd half of the song..it should be constant throughout..make the 2nd half of the song as strong as the first half..in rhyming and cleverness..(sometimes we get in a rush to get it done and finish our work a little on the weak side...:)...but it's a diamond in the rough for sure..i luv the line..her smile..will kill you ...
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