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Well, I guess there's a difference between poetic repetition and being redundant, and your poem is the latter. Can you expand by telling us... what is stressing you out? more ways your body and mind are responding to stress? what is going through your mind while it is racing? I don't necessarily think all poems need to be long. Sometimes you can say a lot with few words, but in your four lines you repeat the same words and ideas, so not a lot is said or felt. If you want to keep is very short...

A good thing to remember when waiting for your own overnight success. I'm not sure this is quite uplifting, but something else along those lines. Very clear and clever.

That was funny. I didn't lol, but I did laugh to myself (ltm?). I don't think the creation and distribution of ebooks will prevent them from publishing new, good stuff. Even the old stuff is still sold in normal paper book format. Barnes and Noble haven't closed their doors yet. Anyway, based on the title I assume you mean a smaller scale apocalypse, like, a writing/publishing industry apocalypse, as opposed to THE apocalypse. If that's true, I really like this. If it's not true, I don't thin...

Well, as far as creating interesting characters goes, this makes me think you're creating a character that appears alone, but is maybe being watched or followed. The watcher or follower could be good or evil, just another person, or more like a deity... Hard to know exactly where you're going with it, but it has potential.