This quote is both funny and true. I think to add your own twist though, you should change mile to another form of mesurement. I have nothing bad to say at all. Great Job!

I dont belive that to be true. Creativity is adding light and color to a dull black painting! I belive you could add more to this quote too. Elaborate. As the reader i feel as if i am left hanging. I think you should add a comma afeter Creativity though. It wouid add better flow.

Kudos Mrs.N, a great leap from your last poem. Defenitly a better flow. I dont believe you should have a semi-colon after fantasy. I also think you dont need a dash between "Newley" and "freed." I love your last line "Crimson is a color i cannot face." It is a great concusion to this poem, not only does it sum up the poem but gives it that last burst of energy that every poem needs! Congradulations!

Dallas, I had no idea you could be so deep, and I like this side of you. It has great flow and rhythem, yet a few things need to be taken care of. I think you should replace "sacred" with another word. Sacred is used to describe something holy. Unless your talking about the greek goddes Aphrodite, then put a different word such as radiant, or shinning. Id also change "wide weelcoming smile" to something like warm smile, or comforting smile. Her soft skin and her blonde hair line, you should s...

Okay Kody, is there anything you DON'T have an odd perspective on? You know what-don't answer that. I love the twisted meaning to it, but i think it is somehowe encouraging sucicide, I'm not sure why i get that vibe, i just do. It is hard to review a quote but I mthink you should put a comma after "..the world reborn..." It will make the whole quote flow better!

I love your use of the parentheses. (sp. I am an awful speller, sorry) I dont like all the sssshhhh's on the sssshhhh, instead, i think you would make a biggetr and better point if it was (shh!) instead. Overall good job!

First off before i even got to the second page i saw a mistske that i was sure to forget if i didnt write it down, the scentece "The news in Germany, where I live, was dominated by the Presidential race,..." I dont understand it. Remove the comma from after "for" their mmistakes, better flow that way. I love all your quirky little facts about the Germans, it adds life and a little more substance to your stroy. (I love the one 'the Germans adore Boston') Made me chuckle. I love how you also po...

Mrs. Necessary, I have one word for you. Beautiful. I am truly touched that you wrote a piece about Wade, for he is talented beyond what anyone expects from a 13 year old boy. He makes you want to smile from his dedication, from his love to write. It radiates to you. Every time you read a piece of something Wade has writtin you seem to feel better about yourself, and better about what you write. Which is an odd thing for a writer to feel, especily after reading someoneelses piece of work. We ...

Okay,the qoute almost contradicts itself, but it's a good thing in this case. I think you should add "ever" inbetween "who" and "loved me" To be honest, I don't like the tittle it seems to have no relation to the topic, I understand where your point is coming from though. You can keep the aspect of that tittle with a more fitting one like "First love for and Ugly Duckling." I like the quote though! Good job.

Good flow dallas. I like the the last line, It adds Flavor. But to me, it needs a little more. I cant put my finger on it, it's just lacking something. I think you should change "warm" to something else. Sure she is warm, but there are about 1 million other adajatives that would better describe mrs.necesssary in this piece. try a word like Kind or Love, or even Pure. Doesn't writing have two t's? so I=change "writing" to "writting" nothing else to say!Great dallas!