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AGE: 31
LOC: Hyampom, CA
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: September 26

deep in the jungle
dark in the jungle
down
down and further more
there is a dance at play
past all the venomous snakes
and stinging nettles
past the lethargy leech
long toothing to my heart

past dismay
past hurray
past victory, failure, success

there is a dance at play
and here I rest
moving through the motions
thrust amongst the rest of us

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Poetry / Mudra
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 Mudra The words are leaving the page Hands are in the air Flower unfolding in sunshine Wind passing through hair. Rain drops are quiet moments alone When they fall on city streets And firework footsteps When they call upon tin roofs. The expression of a simple leaf And the most common hand shake Both beg breath from light And give our glories form. Under an unseen sky That wanders perilously close Are your eyes flashing bright To this subtle song. How many times we’ve danced In th...
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Poetry / Say Hello
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Harpstrings halfaway from then and now the note sounds true to resonance. A chance meeting still believing it's not just mere coincidence. I saw your face from out of a mile rang the same bells as yesterday. And what I heard was a bird soaring higher and higher then coming back again. The same song born strong in a fancy for freedom and no long goodbyes Say Hello. Yes Hello.
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  I remember forgetting about myself the last time we kissed and wondering what blindness your lips spread light to. Down through a dark passage way many colors appear breathing in space their naked vitality. Being a rose, grass glacial lake eyes of a panther lemon drop excitement, the smoke from wild fire are blue brush fingers reaching to the sky. Oh, how the dance takes it's form in the lazy breath of sleepers spreading over unimpeded expanses through the minds of both of us before ...
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Poetry / Old Crow Farmer
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  Blue-black feather sky sailing on a darting emotion the moon has stood still before but not this target heart. Felt in the most unusual of ways, ripples of a stone's throw still flow into shadows calls attention to the details of light shining between us. Tree roots are abounding life the path is effortless, dance steps rooted in the space of a moment to the tune of timelessness. There will always be wind in your hair wolves, deer, bears, swift feet down the mountain fire in you belly,...
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Poetry / Old Crow Farmer
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Black feather sky sailing on a darting emotion the moon has stood still before but not this target heart. Felt in the most unusual of ways, ripples of a stone's throw still flow into shadows, calling attention to the details of light shining between us. Tree roots are abounding in life the path is effortless, dance steps rooted in the space of a moment to the tune of timelessness. There will always be wind in your hair, wolves, deer, bear, hummingbirds, swift feet down the mountain, fire in...
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change the first "we're" to "we are", the upper lip draw of we're does not accent the rest of the line as the the out flowing lip of are matches with the inflow of as. the first stanza doesn't make integral sense without the second and this is nice as my consciousness is illuminated by the keys being given to me after the description of the door. A word of advice, as I think this is part of a larger poem, yes? make the stanza that comes before the first one here as intelligible as the second ...
Non-fiction / Stopping for Lunch
well this is surely written from deep inside of you, wow I really wanted to read more. It's 1:30 in the morning and this is a story I could read till dawn. One of my favorite lines is how mom always answers the cell phone, hilarious. I might be tempted to say sometimes there's too much detail, but you say it really well so I don't notice it so much. You do a good job about conveying the mind quality of the suicidal mentality and the Canyonview ward, the place where people go who peer into the...
Poetry / Run
dung the beginning dung the middle but after "every cell" I wasn't so amused with the time/line rhyme lines. and the This and This wasn't so special either. The use of metaphors/colors/moods is so nice here with the exclamation dramas and the acid apathy landscapes, really got me going with these so as for critique, something different coming out of "Only the urge to keep moving" would be interesting to see, something about the blank space between the upper strike and dot of the exclamation p...
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Poetry / Unbeknownst
really appreciate the first stanza, so nice. Your really good at immediately communicating the imagery and emotional quality of the scene, nice. And I like "Speechless, kindred all around" this is really good too. It would be nice though if you took your ghost writer and floated amongst the crowd. It there a priest? some spiritual official? what is he/she doing? what is their part in this? and the congregate? the individuals here what are the unique different perspectives each has, each perso...