hi, i really like the imagery of the shadow of your silhouette. very beautiful. i can really see this song being played on an acoustic guitar. also, i reckon a lot of people can relate to what you are saying in your lyrics, as i do, cause at some point that happens to us. but yea, really nice lyrics :) dasha

hey, i like the simplicity of your poem as its quite effective and the 'out of breath' pace that you create. i particularly liked your ending. brings the mood back up dramatically. dashax

hey, really like your 'the whores are the only ones looking, someone’s drawn back the curtain on life" line. i like how its actually quite deep..but in a very subtle way. what inspired you to write this poem? dp

i adore this poem. it flows so beautifully. the rhythm you create is so effective, you must of felt very passionate this when you wrote it .. and it really shows. i really like how you make the darkness seem so beautiful. because i think there are a lot of things that arent mentioned enough about the dark side of life and 'darkness in general' that are not necessarily negative. hmm perhaps the mystory of it is beautiful. i particularly like these sections: When the dark comes dancin’ arm in a...

yea but the whole point of loose change was so that the people know how bush wwwwwwasnt really at all involved in any of this, but the far more powerful web of people around him. he was only the front. also i think.. that if you are to confront people with the 'truth' or what you believe to be the truth then you might as well go all the way..without lying to the readers yourself by 'romanticising' the past - as the majority of the American presidents lied to their people and used that to cont...

i love this line "What you can not cage you dare not tame.." i think its beautiful...and very wise as well. and i really like your ending as well. 'love is not a commodity. Not even yours' beautiful poem, love it

i love what youve started with "A painting An imperfect picture" kind of ironic in a way really, because when you paint you can manipulate the images and paint what you want to see rather what is there.. or sometimes the complete opposite. and yet it is still not "perfect" in the same way as a photograph.. also. this may see a bit random.. but do you not think its a bit strange how we as humans have created these cities .. which are beautiful in their own ways.. and dull at the same time. hou...

i love the way you play around with the notion of the darkness.. the lights and the atmosphere. it really does create such a nice dense atmosphere. also i like the the way you structure your sentences. sometimes they are reasonably complex and sometimes they are very simple. which also reinforces the mood you are tying to create. your story is very imaginative.. in a sense that you use a lot of poetic language rather than simply describe?? hopefully that makes sense.

i really like the rhythm you create and the shape it gives to your poem. creates a feeling its almost like somebody nagging at you. or perhaps a routine is slowly eating away your life. the build up really worked for me and "Hello daddy how is your day?" breaks the rhythm at the end and is quite comical