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AGE:
35
LOC: Erie, PA
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: April 25
LOC: Erie, PA
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: April 25
My name is Keith and I have been writing since 1992. I have no illusions. There is no market for my stuff. I enjoy criticism. And even if you hate it I will not stop writing ever.
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Dark Realm Of Evil Beauty Disenchanted I lie beside the glowing embers dying fast the dawn cracks the sky yet there is a shadow cast the seer of souls has chosen me as her prey her black feathers have dimmed the light into gray she moves swiftly towards me as if to speak "I've seen within your heart, what was strong is now weak" deep inside this ethereal shaman illuminates my shame "you're barely alive, a soul waiting for death to claim heed this warning sadness is all that lies beyond" She ...
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Lost Among Frozen Memories Where were you when the sun went down today? It shadowed my path and I can't find the way the picture in my mind that I had drawn memories flicker and then they're gone did you exist it seems I don't remember as the snow hits my face this cold night in December I walk past your grave and nothing comes to mind there is no trace that you left behind I don't see you there in this desolate tomb what is this feeling that now has consumed I'm as empty now as these snow c...
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Dead Not Dreaming Going back to a place I thought long gone to view innocence as a newly risen dawn I must communicate with someone I killed whose ambiguity has now been fulfilled sifting through ashes of long dead dreams in this place nothing is as it seems apparitions haunt my waking hours in this ether that I now scour he was just a boy when I became forlorn I need this essence to be reborn I held him under and watched his release as he drowned and became deceased I stared into that empty ...
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The Dormant When searching for the reasons it's so hard to find even when the answers are right there in your own mind but when you finally listen, what if it's all wrong? and the life you chose is not where you belong even though you believed that it was the way to go your life keeps slipping further and further below fighting against forces that you cannot improve and the pain you feel is getting harder to soothe while everything around you turns into a disaster and time keeps slipping away...
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I like your wording especially "no a symphony of melancholic atrophy". Even as a stand alone line it sounds really cool. I like the way this poem was formatted as well. It flows really well. I also like the dark atmosphere you created for the reader.
This is ok. Honestly I think the rhymes were off a bit and I don't know what this line means "Bored out of mind I just and I stare". It seems that you rhymed just to rhyme.
This is a sad piece. I think the reader will empathize with the narrator. Especially with the current war. I also like that it's short and to the point. Good job.
I really like some of the words you used here like "maleficient". This piece flows pretty good and I like the dark atmosphere you have created. All in all a good read.
I like your form and everything here seems to flow pretty good. I also personally like the nature theme. There is so much you can use here. Good job.
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