decemberskye's profile

I usually focus more on content than things like spelling and grammar and typos but since this is coming up on your final draft, I figured i'd point the small things out, too. "Tate and are experts at crab hunting" should be Tate and I. The g in God should be captalized. I was able to picture exactly what was happening when they sat to catch crabs. Very good description. "Tate got up to run toward the beach. But I pulled him back down..." should be one sentence. It would flow better. I love t...

The beginning didn't keep my attention. It could be because I didn't read the first book, but as the first chapter of a novel, I expected it to start with something exciting or engaging. The beginning of this a lot of back story. Although this is a sequal, being that its a new book I would suggest catching the reader up on what happened before. I don't mean give pages of back story or a full on synopsis of the last book, but maybe offer clues through dialogue and such. Maybe you could give a ...

The dialogue at the very beginning is good, but I would consider rewording a bit. For example, instead of saying (and I'm just making this up of course) "I'll be there in ten minutes," I said, grabbing my coat. "Okay, I'll be ready," she promised, her voice full of excitment. "Make sure you wear a coat," I said, stepping outside into the cold weather. "I don't want to," she replied, sucking her teeth. You can say.. "I'll be there in ten minutes," I said, grabbing my coat. Her voice full of ex...

This is such a great love story. Especially the whole ruth twist. It adds something to the story. I want to say a bit of drama, but not quite. Its just something real, something that can challenge and even end a relationship. I love to read how you two got through it. The fact that the story is true makes it even better. I feel sorry for ruth. She really got the short end of the stick in the story. However, I feel it was partly her fault that joe had to break the news to her the way he did. W...