dellessa's profile
AGE:
28
LOC: United States
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: January 11
LOC: United States
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: January 11
Oh yes, lets face it…I am a far better artist then a writer, but that doesn’t mean I don’t (or won’t)try.
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For the Sake of this Argument... Let us say That I am what you say I say I am: black and red like a claret gem, a princess of more than enough (and of very little) in her ragamuffin finery, in tattermallion wisps. Is that all that I am? A little puff of frippery? A little stained-glass riding hood with (no intents or purposes) but to snag her own wolf? (I honestly do not think myself that shallow.) Let us pretend That I am what you say I am: A fool in shimmering brass bells that twinkle and t...
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I tossed and turned all night, but the tromping of feet through the house finally woke me. Yes, it was probably Lisa. She’s had writers block for the past three weeks and when she has writers’ block she tends to ramble through the house. Tromp. Tromp. I threw back my covers and sat up. No, the noise was coming from up-stairs, in my art studio. I jumped out of bed and ran up the stairs. I inched the door open and peeked in, and almost fell over in shock. It was Lisa, and she was painting, or ...
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"Dear Lord, Noah, throw that garland away it's hideous," Noah gave Gwendolyn a peeved look. He always liked her better when she wasn't being so spastic, and sadly, the holidays always brought it out. He had always figured it was the years spent in her Aunt's mansion. The woman really was kooky and had the strangest ideas about some things. Certainly about boxing day it would seem. And somehow, this had transferred to his dear Gwendolyn. Her tree was a good twenty feet tall. He sighed, tossing...
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Not sure I buy a lot of this. For example, at the begining...how is biting into someone's jugular vein going to stop his screming? It's not blocking an airway, it's a vein. Not an air passage. If anything he might scream more. That is unless she slashed into his neck, but that isn't the same thing at all. Also, the dialogue is a bit stilted, as if you are trying too hard.
Well written and fairly interesting. I wish it was something I could relate to, but it was not.
I'm not sure this is altogether believable. It seems more like hollywood espionage rather than the real thing. So, I wonder, have you actually done research or taken it wholely from your imagination? The writing itself is good. The flow is better than some of the earlier chapters I've read, and your use of dialogue has improved. Keep up the good work.
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