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AGE: 28
LOC: Philippines
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: October 13

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I'm still crying too, deep inside. Invisible tears, they cannot hide: You're not here by my side. You're far away and out of sight, Across the mountains and oceans wide. I whisper a prayer, please be alright! Just say my name, look in your heart; I'll be with you though far apart. Though I may be nowhere in sight - The wind The trees The rain The seas The stars The moon The earth The bees Carry me to your side tonight!
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Quotes / Mind Games
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I don't play mind games so you definitely shouldn't be playing it with me. I only play one game -- the game of life -- and I play it seriously. The curious thing about this game is that in this game of life that I play there can only be one winner -- me. 09/29/2007
Poetry / Pigtails
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3am and wide awake My head is heavy flipping spinning swimming In a pool of tears and memories Of you Had a plan, it was perfect Held my gun, cocked and loaded Don't be hasty, or you'd miss it Drew too soon, could have hit it Yeah I missed it. You were gone, I'm left haunted Had our fun, it was worth it It was worth it. I try and swing your way once more But I see only pigtails I see only pigtails Hello, your back it's cold Your shoulder Used to be so warm But now It's cold, it's over Why don...
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Poetry / Stuck
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And so it comes to this. Silence. Unforgiving, Mind-breaking, Ear-splitting, Unhappy silence. Time passes, screaming Blaming me, Taunting me I knew it long ago When we first met I knew but I was Too afraid Or too selfish. I tried to make things right But maybe not enough Or maybe I was just Too late. So now it comes to this. Silence. As the distance between us Grows with each passing day Unforgiving, Mind-breaking, Ear-splitting, Unhappy silence. I'll be there soon But will I get there in tim...
Quotes / Untitled
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I rejoice not in our similarities, But in our differences. For it is in the things that make us unique that we discover each other's individuality, That we are complimentary. Which, paired with our sameness brings about that ultimate, undeniable truth: That we are one.
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Interesting and insightful Your poetry's delightful Your style is creative A good score, I must rate it!
Very touching and insightful and I am genuinely delighted. I read it at least twice and I am still discovering new things. The flow is very good and I'm really digging the relaxed, honest narrative style. It was short but long enough to be appreciated. I hope she is doing well in her place in heaven. By the way, I love grapefruit - let her know that. :)
Flow and rhythm needs a lot of work. Good use of metaphors though.
Romance / My Love, My Soul
The imagery is vivid and I see what you are trying to do which I think is a unique way of writing e.g. rhyming every verse and the repetition of soul in the same location. I think it's a very good attempt but I feel it could be more effective if you added a little more rhythm ... by choosing more "harmonious" end words, perhaps?
I don't quite understand this piece but I ended up liking it anyway. I guess that's just how poetry is -- you just feel without having to understand. Feel free to keep this review locked, I just want you to know I appreciate your writing.
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Romance / Breathe
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