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AGE:
28
LOC: Cleveland, MS
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: September 15
LOC: Cleveland, MS
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: September 15
My name is Derrick Rogers and my pin name is 2LE2REDERRELL. I enjoy writing poetry. It’s a great oppuntunity for me to express myself and challege myself. Some of my poems have hidden messages in them. I try to do different things with poetry.
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Lucky was an illustrious stallion Midnight black, beautiful skin Loyal, strong with muscles popping out Like Popeye’s eyes in the sight of spinach Three time blue ribbon winner Ruling Southwestern horse competitions But that was seven years in the past Seven years that Lucky’s life had past due Now old, weak with brittle bones Like Olive Oil’s skinny statue No more ribbons, no more racing No more jumping huddles for judges Because that time has come, ticking away For th...
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Lucky was an illustrious stallion Midnight black, beautiful skin Loyal, strong with muscles popping out Like Popeye’s eyes in the sight of spinach Three time blue ribbon winner Ruling Southwestern horse competitions But that was seven years in the past Seven years that Lucky’s life pasted due Now old, weak with brittle bones Like Olive Oil’s skinny statue No more ribbons, no more racing No more jumping huddles for judges Because the time has come, ticking away For the once great stallion To e...
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Time turned into a Hollywood slow mo As I removed myself From a comfortable computer chair Now standing, frozen stiff Only feeling my dark, brown pupils Target tremendous beauty Like Robin Hood’s arrows Stealing from the rich Stealing a longed look Of rich loveliness Taking modest steps Toward an recently polished Old oak library desk Reflecting an lovable likeness Within its deep, dark wood surface Showing beauty’s splitting image Two for the view of one Better yet, for all to see How a blac...
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good poem! I do have a suggestion, you can try it if you like. Change the line "Until the inspiration strikes," into " WHY WHY WHY" and change the line "My days shall end with hopeless nights." into Shall my days end with hopeless nights" It think it flows better that way!
Overall great poem! Love the imagery used in this piece. The line, "I’ll look quite the fool at my autopsy after Rosalba finally cuts me with the Ginzu steak knife or pushes me down the escalator at the food court." is very funny an entertaining.
WOW! This piece is amazing! Great imagery! I think in the line,"The way they run… and drip… and slip…" the word slip could have been lefted out ,but i understand the rhyme effect. Overall great poem!
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