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AGE:
19
LOC: Mayfield, KY
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 04
LOC: Mayfield, KY
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 04
- I’m a nihilist. Not those trendy: “omfg, God hates me, so I’m athiest” kind of nihilists that think the world is out to get them.
- Obviously, I write. Otherwise, my presence here would be useless. I write about darker themes typically, death, destruction, chaos, mayhem. The stereotypes.
- I listen to alot of music, but my favorites are the more extreme genres of metal. My favorite band at the moment is DevilDriver.
- My favorite movie is Zeitgeist.
- I’m not really a big fan of my country.
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She looked to the sky; sunlight beaming off her glassy eyes. And her frailty hangs stationary like a windowpane. Her face is a mere mannequin inside a swirling sea of anonymity, her gaze emanates all with a feeling of disorientation. And her hair blows like November leaves. She sings a dirge of solace; but yet there's a fierce sense of contempt. And somehow below, when I force my fears inside, I can still see a hand full of antidepressants screaming at her from beyond the grave. She tells me ...
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The devil feeds off this virus, writhing about like a headless serpent. The virus that is man. The virus without hinder. The virus without cure. This disease is followed by the unease; Their God upon your throat. Splitting your chest open like surgery, but ripping out your heart like serial murder are the woes of man. Ridding ourselves of the self-righteous means a suicide solution or homicidal retribution or sick and twisted execution. Whichever comes to mind first. Would life in prison be t...
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Oh how lightly doth the butterfly float. Wind caught beneath it's sails, making waves like a boat. The patterns so catchy, aesthetic to the eye so pity that this butterfly had to die. Stutterfly, stutterfly. A cut above. With it's hair, so golden aloft like a dove. A death that seems so beautiful, to rot on the inside. The cold; I shiver and bury you amidst the wheezing tide. Oh how spindly the spider doth spin, you tear it apart, only to rebuild again. Fangs full of venom; but innocent at he...
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A step back, our race retracts. Severing selves straight from the source. Debris from burning buildings split the sky; Killing them all in its course. Towers of fire, have fallen from higher. A gift of the Jihad, of course. Turban bearing terror machines, killing the innocent without remorse. Simple degredations call my name. We can't look past the cash and the fame. Enslaving the minds of the bored; or are we just dreaming in discord? Slave drivers crack their whips. No protests dare escape ...
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Wait/ can you hear the screams/ of unwilling parents/ drowning their children/ in the name of god/ parents bathed in battery acid/ their minds splattered beneath a nine pound hammer/ with that book sewn into their hip/ don't pull too hard/ you'll kill them all/ and you can only massacre/ those with unpopular beliefs/ like-minded puppets/ rule over this land/ their flesh is peeling off/ their eyes are going white/ we're all becoming one/ you have to fight/ keep your skin out of the water/ beca...
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I get the message, believe me I do, but I've never been much of a fan of abstract lyrics unless the use of metaphorical imagery is heavy. I can't say that for this peice. It's not bad by any means, just not really my flavor.
Very good message, albeit a bit cliche' in today's day and age, but most definitely a subject that is real and relevant in society. Good rhyme scheme, two lines free verse, two lines ending in rhyme. It's not unique, but I don't think you were trying to reinvent lyricism as a whole, and instead crafted a solid, well written lyric. Good job.
It's good to finally see someone who thinks around the same general area that I do. Granted, I tend to take it to a darker place, but as long as there are those who share the same general idea; then it doesn't really matter where they take it, I don't guess. I did find a few flaws in the flow of this work. At times the flow was perfectly fine, the others I felt like I was tripping up some stairs. The rhyme scheme also seems to change about midway through into a more free-verse style. Otherwis...
Favorite Line: “The nelly old queen looks constipated” - Page 8 I'm going to start this review by saying my only real gripe is that it's only 16 pages. Honestly, one of the best story peices I've ever read. I drew the conclusion that this was merely a peice of an entire novel. I shouldn't like to trouble you, but it would be awesome if there was some way I could read this novel in its entirety, if that is indeed what this is a peice of. Now, on to the review. I'm not sure if the fact that the...
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I liked it, definitely had an urban street feel to it. I liked the word choice, though you should definitely improve on your dialect a bit.
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