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AGE: 25
LOC: Gainesville, FL
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: July 10

A little obsessive, a little more compulsive, kind of a mess. I’m meticulous, competitive, and full of angst. It’s no wonder i like to write, and rewrite, rephrase, shuffle sentences and mix metaphors. I love transcendentalism, existentialism, and cute little vixens drenched in the hues of the moody blues.
I hate politics and the fact that the only way to counter them is more politics.
I love stories.

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Short Story / Dour Prospects
Version 1
3 Reviews   0 Comments
It seems only a speck from here, H. thought as he peered up at his cabin. I occupy a speck. He watched as a thin trail of smoke from last night’s fire was struck by the dawning sun and as patches of sunlight nested in the crowns of the highest pines. H. stood like a sentinel on a rocky out-cropping that jutted out from the sloping mountain-side, looking out over the alpine canopy and up the path that trickled down in slanted tiers through forest columns and further up to his ram-shackle vist...
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Non-fiction / Trans
Version 23
5 Reviews   1 Comment
As a child, I loved to build drip-castles on the beach below the dunes. I would sit for hours setting wet sand droplets one on top of another, building up a sculpture of compromised structure and grace. Water and Patience are masters of form. Eventually I would look up to find myself enshrined in meticulous candle-wax towers and delicate arches only to have my breath, and my world with it, suddenly swept away by the indiscriminate icy hand of the changing tides. In my fickleness I abandon th...
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Poetry / The view
Version 5
9 Reviews   3 Comments
The view from a boat in the middle of a lake; a sweeping horizon of shoreline. Thoughts ripple outward, touch white sand, linger a moment, and rebound; dull thud on a wooden hull. Clumps of dusty grape clouds topple over the treetops. The sudden rhythm of rustic forest snares rustled by raindrops. Vermilion Maple leaves; slide along silver rivulets, to hover over Heaven's hand-mirror. The Asian-orange sun squatting atop pine spires, stretches shadows that pierce reflections. The boat points s...
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Version 2
8 Reviews   2 Comments
“It seems only a speck from here.” H. thought. “I occupy a speck.” He always had the same thought as he stood on the nearly barren rocky precipice halfway down the valley and gazed up at his minute ramshackle of a cabin. Indeed, it was only from here that he could look out from under the towering pines and gaze up through the channel of trees that marked the Southerly path down into the valley. A thin trail of smoke from last night’s fire was caught by the dawning sun and patches of sunlight ...
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Version 18
10 Reviews   7 Comments
I walk a midnight curcuit through a neighborhood I don't belong in. I see the ghastly houses of strangers to whom, by day, I smile and chat with. A preacher. A banker. A chef. I had come out for air, for something real, but this is all manicured and veneered and so am I when I'm standing in it. It clings like sand to my bare-feet. It nestles in the deepest recesses where the attack of friction feels all too personal. As a child I loved to build drip-castles on the beach. I would sit for hours...
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Poetry / Time To Go!
interesting how the run-away lovers storyline is developed in the periphery. sort of recycled 50's bop beat language but in that aspect the language is a little infertile too many conjunctions and prepositions I feel a lot of cliche's "the time is now or never" "beat the streets" the cupid thing I liked stuff like "trapped jaw flapping, dodging rimshot blows from desperate dad" thats nice language, nice sound
Short Story / Bruv
Hmm. it's good. I'll try to give practical advice. In the beginning I sort of assume Harich was a dog or wolf or some animal of that sort. Then I find he's a man. That sort of works better than thinking he's a man then finding out he's... well, not quite human either. I think this description could use some tweaking though. it is sort of distracting to be thinking to myself while reading, "did the dog just talk? did the narrator imagine it? am i mixing up two characters?" I think in the first...
Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Life's Ultimate Test
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you really captured a day of childhood. the camaraderie, the mystery, the fun. I like the image of eating the black honey with bees stuck in it and Dinny walking straight up the trunk. The girls swimming in missionary dresses, the boys caked in mud, the guardian animal. really good. a keepsake of childhood. I grew up like this, i can see it, smell it even. I like the feeling of barren solitude in sight of Frog Hill. I don't know what a firm white salt pan is or what Eunice's place is, but I w...
Good poetry. Nice use of conflicting feelings. affection turned callous gourmet I liked the image of a dog running away wishing the world was still full of lions. They have that courageous tenacity, they look for it, hope for it. I have a hound and i think you captured it nicely. again the juxtaposition of your understanding it's wilder nature/your sister's sentiment is well done. the same positional contrast takes place again in the fourth stanza. I think this might be a little too hannibal ...
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