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AGE: 34
LOC: Bakersfield, CA
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 18

...just another Dave in the neighborhood.

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Romance is fay. Look under clovers.
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Repose in meadows between the mountains.
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Non-fiction / Hide, and Go Seek!
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Romance hides. I count, and seek.
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Poetry / Ladybug
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brilliant red gloss hidden eyes direct black spots delicately cross inconspicuous branch goes on in ignorance leaf struggles with weight foe to ant empires snacking on their aphid crops manna is stolen fragrant memory soothing sight sweetly startles gently misleading her peace is mirage beauty mirrored by false wings slapped so fast it stings
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Poetry / Just Friends
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I try to be your friend, sit apart, chew on your banter, comment facetiously, pun. You chuckle. “Shut-up!”… your hands serve your ticklish, yet bashful reply. That is what my sense knows. My soul knows other words are whispered. My spirit massaged even in your absence. Incomparable elation follows my memory of you. Break my sensual grasp of love! Leave me fumbling sacrifices of self, undeserving of your adoration. I cannot earn you. --- I try to be your friend. Amorous catalysts speed through...
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I find your vision of Palin darkly comic and absurdly foreboding, reminiscent of tales of the Antichrist... Palin is the "Whore of Babylon"? I laughed my head off! Your use of scientific terms intrigues me, especially in describing the child. I love the irony you present in "Upon a Blue Beach". Overall, you paint a picture of America in shambles and heading toward a Roman collapse. Your idiom, being cultivated by Russian ideologies, I find somewhat dense and difficult to interpret, but it kee...
Poetry / Shades of time
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Poetry / A Hum
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Journal, Diary, & Blogging / My Happy Pill
Hmm. I am not too familiar with this genre. Is it standard to be grammatically loose? While I did not find much profound, I did enjoy and easily relate to your sentiment. My happy pill is finding the romance in each moment, as I believe you are relating.
Ok. I'll be honest. I did not read the entire submission so feel free to request a refund. I will not be offended. However, at first glance I can certainly say that your intended audience is not sophisticated enough with sentence composition or reading comprehension to enjoy this story. At least, this is based on my 15 years as an educator. The poor literacy of the few thousand children I have worked with leads me to believe they are going to be turned off by the complexity of your first few ...
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