This is quite depressing (which might be a good thing since haiku doesn't normally inspire emotion in me). Be sure, though, when you title things to put an actual title, especially in haiku. When you only have three simple lines to explain a point, the title can add so much more to the overall poem. Plus, it sounds nicer!

Huh?!? What is this? Certainly not a short story. And if it's the review of a story, it certainly gives no constructive criticsm. Oh well.

I really like the style you're going for (I'm assuming a take-off of e.e. cummings?), and I love the way you use punctuation only towards the end and "u" instead of "you" at the beginning. It's a nice progression. However, I think you lose what you're trying to say by the end. At the beginning the lines conclude one another before starting a new idea, but that style is lost at the end when each line becomes its own statement. But I don't know, perhaps you did this on purpose.

As I've told you before, I love your work. You're still my only "favorite user" I have listed. I love how, specifically in this poem, your words slip from line to line and elegantly change to each new subject without missing a beat. I do have a couple questions, though. I don't understand the lines about the scent of the air, mimosa to mauoleum - it just doesn't fit for me. And why, at the beginning, say "is it alright to say I?" It's your poem, you can do as you wish! Or, at least, that's ho...

I don't understand. I gave you a seven mostly because you followed 'correct' haiku proceedure - but I really don't understand your message. What is the "subtle message" of the second line, and why must you count to win?

Well, I don't know anything about your alexandrine form, but I do know a little about imagery - and you definately have a lot of it here. Lines like "I hug him when you're gone," "preaching to ghosts," and "Friday night binges" particularly stand out. Overall, I think it's fantastically done.

I hope this isn't a serious post; and if it is, I apologize. But there is very little subject matter here, and virtually not subject matter with depth. "I really want one" and "Pour me another beer" just don't scream POETRY to me. Sorry.

Was this supposed to be funny? Because, if not, I'd feel really bad for laughing at it. Let's see...there's a good beginning, describing the chair. There's a good ending, describing the totality of sadness. But the middle is just absurd (yet oddly entertaining); I hope that's what you were going for.

I really like the concept here, especially with your "not much time"s in the parenthesis. But there are a few things bugging me. "Times up" in the last line is a little harsh (considering he just died); maybe "out of time" would be better. And, I must admit, I've never been a fan of odd analogies, and I'm not sure the dam one works...but I'm not the one to ask about that (since I'm prejudiced against them, anyway).

The quote is ok. But, to be honest, I like the description you left for the reviewer much better. And the whole thing can be a quote, just put it in. The quote, itself, is mildly awkward when it stands alone (as far as the metaphor is concerned). How can you sculp a pathway? As I said, the explanation is what makes it work.