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i like the extremes here. Dieing gives her stimulation. She hates to look at herself but though out the story her eyes are wide open. She also talks about what fate has to bring her but yet she's not letting fate do its job and in the end you figure out it'snot her actual looks but who she is..i thought this was good

this is a good story.i think the characters drawl gives makes you fell sympathetic towards the character. Scince the boy has never seen rain you feel the dept of their situation. So in the end when they're finally able to make some money off the baseballsyour rooting for them. i thought this entertaining and amusing..

your tourment shines thru in this peice..she is there..but she's not..you give just enough information to symathize with you..but im not sure how she feels about you..when you say your imprisoned..i can feel your pain..its to the point of how you feel..i think maybe you could add a little more mystery here..like why your not with her....

i really liked this...i like how you use kali..buddha death godess and make her cute and little..this story was entertaining.. the thought of using the coffin for a cooler is very imaginative..when you say three girls killed themselves for satan..i assuming thats will..the end was chilling..and when you say no big dealit gives impact...

I thought this story had all the elements of being entertaining and amusing. I like the depts used to emphasize the masucline character for instance ,"the furnace of my lust".And her every breath seems to depend on him, almost as if he is giving her life, although the character is very masuline, you give the female her power in her pleasure,like when you say, "her moans stroked my fire."and "watching the pleasure written all over your face." The male character seems to enjoy her enjoyment mo...