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AGE: 20
LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 20
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Poetry / Lindy Hop
Version 2
3 Reviews   2 Comments
Fag-end, bag-men Tokin up your stubbings. Hi you Joe; That’s my damn bin Get your scabies off my things!   Sup up your fine blend of Scotch Go where cool cats lindy-hop Bet you’re feelin’ tip-top-notch I ain’t never felt so low   Red night, dark light She’s Amsterdam, In stained tights: Sane sucking cock Or a crack pipe. Plunge in the goose-flesh With your knife.   So get your great red lolly-Pop Go where cool kids Lindy hop Bet your feeling tip-to...
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Version 1
3 Reviews   0 Comments
I've never been to Paris And I've never been to Rome But I've seen a million places From the comfort of my home And I'll tell you that the best of them The only spot for me Is the groove I've carved with my buttocks In front of my TV
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Poetry / But Sky in Lake
Version 1
3 Reviews   0 Comments
but sky in lake and slow art all could storm milky winter behind my soft lick above the girl soaking the high summer beneath the breeze she threaded clouds some rainbow rose which hazel i have willed inspite of all short come - ings
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Poetry / Lazarus
Version 5
5 Reviews   8 Comments
p((. Where is my Lazarus? I need to be revived Forgiven, for it must be p((. My fault p((. I could have done more, p((. i could have been less. ********** p((. Where is my Sorrow Give me back my Blood, I'm sorry it was p((. I could have done more, p((. i could have been less. ********** p((. Where is my Lonliness? What other penance for Failing family, which was p((. My fault p((. I could have done more, p((. I could have been less.
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 Plus-button Grief
Version 2
5 Reviews   8 Comments
In Case Of Emergency On my wall, swans graze mud flats In still, brilliant white reeking black, The photo hides behind your back. Next to a tide turns in A Saffron Double-spread; monks marched; now We scent the dead, in Burma. But here it stinks of soft biscuits The atmosphere: no firmer. Our words, like dunkers too long sit Beneath the rim of my hot sips, Are overweight and so break off; Silenced by my smoker’s cough. Mad fits, old biscuits In case of emergency: Lose Wits Once, in New Street...
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Poetry / Love
The last pair of lines is brilliantly witty, but the other couplets leave me cld, especially heart and dart - it fels forced and cliched. More development of structure and voice might help produce a more complete poem. Josh
Poetry / Sea of Change
Good collection of images and some quite intriguing phrases, especially 'disposable dreams' and 'convenience of things'. A couple of lines are over stretched with articles though, for instance: 'made up of' could be just 'of' producing a simpler beat and easier, more natural reading 'of what is a' maybe of 'of the' or 'of a' for the same reason. I see this as a sort of an elegy to a depressed perspective or situation. Given the Sea Change that is Obama's victory this could quite possibly be a...
Horror / My Lady Jane
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why can't she just be called amy wynn, its a nice normal name. To me, at least, Amethyst McNamara feels like a classic forced through Fantasy name, and it really puts people who like to read believable tales off of the story before it's even begun. Unless it's absolutely necessary to the plot at least lose the proto-scottish McNamara, it really is cheesy beyond belief to us Brits. seems a bit odd that the detail is suddenly skipped when Josh hails the cab. Maybe move his physical description ...
Flash Fiction / Midnight Love
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