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Hi, Thank you for sharing your work with us. The ideas I want to stress in terms of revision are "be specific" and "tempo." I would also like to encourage revision of the first half almost entirely cut out and you, the poet, begin to pick up the thread that began to emerge during the second half of your piece. That often happens in poems, we start to discover why we sat down to write halfway through writing, but then the first words need to be sacrificed to make way for the completeness of th...