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AGE:
44
LOC: Detroit, MI
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: June 25
LOC: Detroit, MI
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: June 25
If it weren’t at some point injected in my veins and even now running through my heart and mind with my life’s blood. If I didn’t need it like food and water, oxygen, poetry would merely be something I did in case the real estate thing didn’t work out.
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Sometimes lyrics fall forth like overdue babies in mid-town taxis unexpected, sudden, complete, needing only to be cleaned up and made presentable. Others, breaching and stubborn, require forceps and incubations before presentation to the world. Still others too weak to come forth alone, require surgical extraction and oft even that to disappointment and with great pain to the bearer. But all are miracles. Every word is a prayer, every poem an offering My prayers are not always reverent but a...
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I don't understand the story. I would guess someone is seeing a spouse cheat. The imagery is a little disjointed "my fingers still thorny" has no meaning to the reader. Was there action? She felt the icy feet of what on her lips? How did she come to taste the mangled blood? How was the narrator's stomach pummelled? Who lived ever after? I would say that what is most missing is the plot or focus. Even loose or short pieces require a logic path, so its drawing a conclusion even while its settin...
I like the mood that's being set with "let this be where I belong", but I don't understand the reference "in this corner of your sweet and round." The statement of "rewoven back" is a little redundant and woven may not be the strongest image for a back. It appears unfinished
A critic and author once told me that the hardest thing to write about was the practice of writing and he strongly discouraged it. This of course has led to my fascination and love of writing about writing and reading other writer's writings about writing. I think your poem connects with writers, it did to me. Very nice piece.
I don't feel qualified to speak on the Crime, Thriller & Mystery overall with only this chapter to reference. It is a good story, though. Very well written. I like the way you bring the scenery into the story, (the ottoman, the table) as opposed to just having the protagonist looking about. There was a minor typo on the first page where the "at the church" phrase was repeated. It left me wanting to know what happened next and what happened prior. Nice job. Please keep at it.
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