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Praying and Pooping I've never been too good at pooping. And now I stand in a medical lab watching the toilet with a too-small bucket in my hand, concerned. Like when a friend asks you to pray for her out loud and you hope you understand her need enough to get the prayer right, because it's hard to pick up the pieces of a missed prayer, even with grace. Alone there's wiggle room, trembling under the light of God's mercy, He forgives, and there is some Comet above my head, i...
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Praying and Pooping I've never been too good at pooping. And now, standing in a medical lab in Tacoma, WA., I watch the toilet with a too-small bucket in my hand, concerned. Like when a friend wants you to pray for them out loud and you hope you understand their need enough to get it right, because it's hard to pick up the pieces of a missed prayer, even with grace. Alone there's wiggle room, trembling under the light of God's mercy, He forgives, and there is some Comet above my head, in...
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Praying and Pooping I've never been too good at pooping. And now, standing in a medical lab in Tacoma, WA., I watch the toilet with a too-small bucket in my hand, concerned. Like when a friend wants you to pray for them out loud and you hope you understand their need enough to get it right, because it's hard to pick up the pieces of a missed prayer, even with grace. Alone there's wiggle room, trembling under the light of God's mercy, He forgives, and there is some Comet above my head, in...
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Tiny blood-nosed clowns cart wheel through the air, like snowflakes in orange jumpsuits; some spin yo-yos, others just laugh from split-pea vocal cords, all black-eyed. Hundreds tumble through the air, all around me, roll down my body, under my shirt, under my skin. They giggle and tickle my lips as they nestle into my beard. They plumb my chin, hook it up to my ears. Mousey droppings dribble from my lobes, rolling out of the canal like gum balls. My flushed skin, hidden by my beard, b...
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Hi, this is about the most blatant case I've seen of a wonderful poem being held back by archaic form. I really think what you have going here is really delightful but it's being held back and made less accessible by the way your writing. Sometimes people think that by writing archaically you sound more poetic, but if you read the great poets of now and the past few decade you'll see that's not what poetry is about at all. Poetry is meant to capture the reader and show them an experience, but...
This is a really wonderful idea for a kids story. It's pretty light for such a serious subject, I wonder if it would be good to flesh out how the kids feel about their GG not knowing who they are. There could be a lesson of love for the weak in there. I like rhymes, it's not formulaic which is nice. It reads really well and easy which is obviously good for kids. This is a lovely piece, I just think that maybe you might want to take the reaction of the kids to their GG not knowing them a littl...
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