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AGE: 35
LOC: Little Rock, AR
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 05

W… definitely not on my favorites list. I value honesty. It’s my screaming flaw. Big bold, bright colors make me happy. I’ve been told that my aura is green – Kermit-the-Frog green – on another occasion – indigo w/ gold spiky stuff around my head, pink, VERY pink, and most recently, goldy yellow with bright blue in the middle. Of course, I wasn’t told what that’s supposed to mean. I have an idea what it’s about though – goes back to that “Big, bold bright colors make me happy” or it could just mean that I need to quit bugging Lady R every time I see her with “What color am I right now? ... okay how about now?  ... and now?” I have a temporary tattoo that I’m saving for a special occasion. I’m a lefty with ambidextrous capabilities as m…

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Short Story / Six Words on A Nuisance
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I swear... chiggers are the devil.
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Journal, Diary, & Blogging / monstrous
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A cool quaking jagged monster is bubbling to my dermis. It threatens to transform me into the bitch that I never allow myself to be. It scares me because when I close my eyes, I can see what it's capable of doing. What I'm capable of doing. What I want to do and could never admit to wanting needing desiring feeding feeling. Judgments, you see. They're everywhere. And I fear that I can't contain it any longer. It's not thoughtful. It's certainly not pretty. I wish I could quell this god damned...
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Quotes / surreal
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David Lynch crawled into my head to feast and left me his dessert crumbs. They were delicious.
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Quotes / surreal
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David Lynch crawled into my head to feast and left me his dessert crumbs. They were delicious.
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_"Unfortunately, when it comes to matters of the heart, I never think with my head."_
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Poetry / free me
As this stands, mystery and vagueness does not serve this bit of writing. As I read through this, I started to look for one stand out soundbite and I kept reading cliche after cliche. I want to know the story(/stories) behind what you've written because I think this has the potential of attention grabbing. You alluded to it with your tally of men. Of all this poem, writing of your pen in hand that's "ready to write a testimony" resonates as the most personalized statement and it's the one bit...
Humor/Satire / The Dare Devil
Cute anecdote! And I love the ending - it's perfect. Thanks for sharing... A few suggestions - the story seems stripped to bare essentials. When storytelling, it's good to use adjectives, superlatives, adverbs to spice up the storytelling and give the reader some sensual details. Your story could use some more descriptors answer a few more questions for your readers, fill in the blanks... Also a few of the phrases were awkward, but I understood what you meant... so a few suggestions for impro...
Flash Fiction / The Addict
Holy shit! You just told my story - in a tight, concise glimpse. Bravo, PB! I deleted my myspace profile for that very reason. Working in an addiction research clinic, believe me, the idea of doing serious research on social networking addiction, has been tossed. Its effects can be visceral.
PB, this is some really great writing - especially tying your personal interest in this obscure topic to personal experience. I'm actually thinking I may forward this to a friend of mine who is gluten intolerant. My only hestitance - light mention of statistics (I love the Australia comparison!) or direct reference to studies... and she's a scientist. :) I have no doubt you've done your thorough and exhaustive research on this, but I'm sure she'll question your sources. That would be my only ...
Humor/Satire / 28 Year-Old Flavors
:) I have no criticisms on your structure. I get it... rhythm, flow, timing. I was criticized on this site for something I'd similarly written. I think it works. My friends who are writing professors think it works. My friends who are professional writers have no criticisms of this. I say this because you don't need to be discouraged by that sort of criticism. As for the content of the writing, I like the juxtaposition of a childhood element with a very adult element - it's playful. As a typi...