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AGE: 30
LOC: Rolla, MO
GEN: Female
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Screenplay / Poptarts & Bondage
Version 1
14 Reviews   3 Comments
FADE IN INT. ABBY’S ROOM – DAY - EARLY MORNING The bed is heaped with blankets, occupants are not visible. Empty beer bottles lay on the floor next to the bed. A can of whipped cream, cigarettes and an alarm clock are among items cluttering the bedside table. The alarm RINGS. A MOAN is heard from under the covers. A hand comes out from under the covers, flaps around for and then turns off the alarm clock. ABBY a mid-to-late twenties, blonde haired woman sits up clutching the sheet to her ches...
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Haiku/Senryu / Jaded
Version 1
2 Reviews   1 Comment
Painfully jaded I try so hard not to be Please save me from me
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Short Story / No other way
Version 1
19 Reviews   7 Comments
I watched as the surgeon lowered the scalpel to the betadine stained skin. For five years I have watched the same gloved hands start the same procedure, but I have never seen them shake before. I standing completely still, but inside my brain is frantic; searching for another solution or at least a way to buy us some more time. The monitor beeps catching my attention. 40 beats per minute, not much longer before even this last ditch effort wouldn’t be enough. I close my eyes briefly trying to ...
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Poetry / Beautiful One
Version 1
2 Reviews   1 Comment
I’m not an ugly girl But I will never be called beautiful For the most part I’m ok with that I guess I’m used to it now I know my limitations And I put extra effort into being …the funny one …the compassionate one …the smart one …the sweet one …the sexy one …the needed one Because I am never going to be …the beautiful one But for the most part I’m ok with that Because in the end The only one that matters Is the unforgettable one
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Short Story / Megan's Game
Version 2
19 Reviews   3 Comments
I could tell the exact moment that you stopped paying attention to everything else and started paying attention to me. I didn’t let on that I knew you were looking; I avoided your eyes on purpose, but secretly slid small glances at you from under my eyelashes. I could feel the weight of your stare almost like fingers barely brushing my skin. I did things on purpose, planned things that I normally wouldn’t do; things just for you…because you were looking. I sat perfectly posed, pushing out my...
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Short Story / Nightmare
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Poetry / She Was Gone
I liked this, a lot actually. I thought the context was good, thought it was well written and had good imagery. I have only a few suggestions... all of which could just be my own personal preferences. The ending did seem a little off... I got a little lost. There is obviously some typo with the double 'of', but the problem for me is I can't really work out what is was supposed to be... 'off' still doesn't leave with me with a clear picture of what happened. Either draw it out a few lines and ...
50.0% Review Quality (2 Votes)
Poetry / me?
Good job, I liked it and the message came through well. In the fourth line, my brain keeps trying to finish the old sentiment and add 'from the tree'... but maybe that's just me. I like the flow of the questions... but you might try writing them in a similar way. am i fooling myself? am i that different from them? Good job overall.
50.0% Review Quality (2 Votes)
Flash Fiction / Redemption of Betrayal
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Poetry / Darkness
Having every word capitalized was distracting for me, but that's just my personal choice.