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AGE: 47
LOC: Neenah, WI
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 16

Poetry, short fiction, flash fiction

many of these poems/stories were from older accounts I closed. My bad. Won’t do that again.

Won several scholarships for writing.
Edited several small newspapers, chapbooks, literary journals.

any time for discussion of our work

Blessings, Gregory

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Flash Fiction / Scrawny Sad and Dark
Version 3
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Kelly stared at the planks, the honey wasps, wood ants, and the wolf spiders crawling between the cracks. The lifeguard, a big bronzed arm college freshman, waved Kelly down. The guard asked him his name and if he wanted to swim. Kelly said he did not know how. From the edge of the deep end a kid, yelled repeatedly,  what Kelly thought of himself, "He's a wimp. He'll drown." Standing alone, he thought of his cat and fish, his two sisters, his mother drinking coffee, ...
Poetry / Summer Lake
Version 3
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My children dove quick as plastic white lids blown off bait containers, swift as bluegills that nipped their legs, hairless chests soft as suckers bellies. I preferred swimming pools, clear water, sloped bottoms, feet and depth marked. The boys swam, stood still and peed, gave each other pinches, tugged at each others’ shorts. Tiptoed up to their noses and floated effortlessly. I stood still in a cloud of minnows that spat sand. Crayfish bit my toes. The boys waved hystericall...
Haiku/Senryu / Migration
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Green mustard dill weed Pumping royal red black wings Wisconsin south bound  
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Poetry / Our Dead Fathers
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Fingers trace letters and dates, big as thumbnails and carp scales, curved like fins and innards. Brown rivers flow north and crows darker than shadows roost in gray muscled oaks above a finger length of snow covering grass wounds healing. Be quiet fathers. Sons’ foreheads press letters and dates, deep as worms and sown seeds, rows like victory gardens. Starlings and cornstalks, full of fear chase of dead grackles’ chicks and cracked eggs along smocked soil and sky above a finger ...
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Shots of schnapps, short taps of Miller High Life. My mother's girlfriend shows up in leather, nails polished ebony, limbs like oak racks, a happy helical birthday whip hung on the waistline of her inner thigh, wax teased. Mother's enduring menopause drank industrial strength vodka, trauma traced translucent arms and thighs. My father was stuck back in my mind nakec off the highway rest stops, with stinging nettles up his ass Teaching himself not to cry.  
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Poetry / "Sabhikalpa"
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Poetry / Keep Holding On
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Poetry / Love or Like
Does not matter when you wrote it. Would you consider another title to grab an editor's wrath? suggest "Rachel, Sport and my Family." Keep the five stanzas. Suggest Whoop dee do as a title and delete the 1st stz. One of your stongest lines is, ...TJ is insane ... Excellent work. Gregory
Right off, your title has tense problems: should be "The Way a Woman's Eye Smile." The major gaffe will not attract an editor. Your two best lines, build around them, are: doll houses packed away, and, shaking freckled hand. Consider more imagery, even line lengths. Keep up. Gregory
No I didn't see her, but I think you could have a better title, "Breasts and Punches"? maybe describe the beauty mark. the 3rd stz. is confusing because I think of heroin addiction, spousal abuste, and sexual promiscuity, especialy with the next stanza. Is it her or the narrator that is having mental and physicall difficulties. Despite the love the narrator shows for her, "celluite bimbo," seems awarkward, something he would not to refer her as. Excellent work. Gregory