I can see this is an experimental poem, but it was still intersesting to read and it had a good flow which was good.

I found myself lost in your words as the flow was perfect. It could be slightly more clearer as it was difficult to establish the point of the poem. I thought this line finished it well "because it did not know it was more than a Rose", But again you could explain it more :-)

Wow... I've read the rough version you did and this is amazin! It flowed well, imagery was great. It kept me reading and I'm sure if it's performed it would be even better :-). I thought these lines were the absolute best: "i swear we’d make history together like romeo an juliet you’d rise before the sun, cover the world in ya silhouette" Brilliant :-)

Woah... Quite a contrast from your other item. It's powerful and your words seem fullof anger. Do you really mean this: "the hell with life an everythin else that kept me alive" Or is it just a way to get your message across? Do you actually fel everything you have written?

Ouch. I thought this was powerful. You can tell it's from the heart. Why don't you develop this further into a full length poem?

I, personally, really enjoyed reading this and wanted to know more :-). You descriptions were perfect and the last line finished it brilliantly, good work :-)

I'm slightly confused, what exactly id the message? I thought this part was great though, it really drew me in :-) Bring out the dead. Bring you all out Hollowed on the inside; Good work :-)

Loved the first line as it immediately got me asking questions. I was hooked throughout as you have an engaging storyline and easy to follow. The ending was amazing. A beautiful finish :-)

This was a nice little piece. The 'mossy gate' shows how time has past. And 'Tripping on childhood' I suppose you mean the memories coming back? Very nicely done :-)